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Letting go isn't all its cracked up to be
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Letting go isn't all its cracked up to be |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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You lean casually against the yesterday's lamppost unchanged sexy, gorgeous and as appealing as ever. I know each step hurts as I pass by the fact that you aren't and will never be mine. If my head weren't in the clouds most days, I could avoid all this and just find another street to walk down, but as of yet, I haven't found a better view. [This message has been edited by jellybeans (edited 02-01-2001).] |
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Tammy16 Junior Member
since 2000-11-26
Posts 21 |
And even though each step hurts our hearts, sometimes we don't really want to find another street to travel. Tammy |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Reading this I felt a rush...I think it was the way the words were moving along, it read itself to ME....That's a great feeling...but the message is too sad. "I walked beside the evening sea And dreamed a dream that could not be." George William Curtis |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Sometimes there simply isn't a better view. *S* Great poem... I identify all too well. *S* (But yanno... I do remember telling you to be careful about using terms like "cracked up" when they could so easily be applied to our mental condition! LOL) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
tammy, yep, guess, the feet will follow when the heart is ready kathleen, thank you, that is high praise and I appreciate your comments very much  suthern, lol, I know, but hey I am honest if nothing else, and i actually get to that mental state...you will probably be the first to tell me, so I ain't worried thanks lady |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jellybean, You just keep jellyrolling along. Like the way you think and write. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
no, it isn't... letting go is WAY too hard.... *sigh*.... as always, your words speak like a mirror to me and it's really good to see you again, y'know? thanks for responding to my thread in announcements.... i KNEW you sounded familiar!!!  this is a fine piece of poetry, girl! .... stick around... missed you |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I could avoid all this and just find another street to walk down, but as of yet, I haven't found a better view. ============= oh man ... you aint never lied my friend talk about sweet poetic truths .. what a very cool write ... so much said in a few impact & metaphor laced well chosen and written lines. very cool indeed If my slight Muse do please these curious days ... The pain be mine ... but thine shall be the praise. ~Shakespeare~ |
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kcsgrandma Senior Member
since 2000-09-24
Posts 1522Presque Isle, ME |
I really feel the ending of this poem. It can be hard to let go, even when you know it's hopeless. Very nicely said! To love another person is to see the face of God. - Les Miserables Marilyn |
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jeremydraul Senior Member
since 2000-08-01
Posts 1118State of Despair |
Well I dont believe I have the talent as you; therefore I shall offer no expertise on this piece considering it doesnt seem to be at fault. I loved the ending. I dont think that letting go is always the best thing to do, escpecially if theres a scene to glance upon. Thanks for the read! -Jeremy Raulinaitis "I believe that man will not merely endure: he will prevail. -William Faulkner (Noble Prize Speech.) |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
seymore, thank you, that's a cool thing to say doreen, yep, knew if you read, you would understand, and yep, its nice to be here too, thanks jm, thank you girl, your comments mean a lot, you put out some pretty awesome stuff yourself ksg...thank you |
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