Open Poetry #12 |
Opinions Wanted Desperately |
Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
Hi there this is my first entry and I'd like to prepare you for this poem by explaining it first. I am a woman who was raped and molested for several years and because of this childhood I have never ever developed friendships. I never trusted anyone. ever. However, recently I met a woman who has become very special to me and I've grown to care for her very much. It is not a romantic caring just one of friendship. I have not yet told her this but I wrote this poem for her. Please read it and let me know if you understand it. If you like it. Do I make my feelings clear enough? will she understand it? should I give it to her? MY HEARTS PARADOX Where there had once only been Fearful emptiness, there is now unfolding a wealth of vitality. A beauty unearthed and perfected. Brought to light as if by flicking on a switch. I've discovered the glorious healing force of the universe. THE FORCE OF LOVE. I'm breaking the chains of old beliefs. Fears that kept me in bondage. I'm growing toward a more fullfilling, more enriched life. I realize now that I have been clutching my past so tightly to my chest that I have left my arms too full to embrace the present. I've turned people into objects of my game rather than subjects of my heart. The curtains of my heart are unfolding Like the petals on a flower. Illuminating my soul, Exposing the core of my being. The walls of my heart are crumbling around me, Leaving me open and afraid. I see your outstretched hand reaching out to me trembling with kindness yet, I am afraid to take it; But if you dig deep within yourself You will reappear with a key this key will open up my heart when I am feeling afraid. Here is how to care for me when I am with fear. Move slowly, as if approaching a butterfly, Have gentle, calm eyes. Stay centered from my panic. Then, when we reach this place of safety JUST HOLD ME! Did anyone understand this? Did I make my feelings clear enough or was it hard to comprehend? Should I give it to her? Any and all responsed will be greatly appreciated. Thank you |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
First~ Welcome! Second~ this is so touching.......I love this! I hope you do give it to your friend......I'm sure she'll understand that it's just friendship not romance It's good to love your friends.......and it's good to tell them that you love them..... I'm so sorry about your childhood.......I hope you keep breaking down that wall........good luck. I hope to read more from you........this is the BEST place to share your heart through writing and friendships. -SEA |
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laryalee Member
since 2000-06-19
Posts 352Alberta, Canada |
Lisann, this is well-defined and a very sensitive poem....it reflects not only your friendship but the beginning of your healing.... It will be fully understood by your friend, and I know she will cherish it. And do continue to write! My thoughts are with you. Lary |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I did understand and emphasize... e mail me, and I will explain further? Love to you. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Absolutely give it to her. It is very well written, sincere and loving in the right way. I have no doubt she will appreciate it greatly.... |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
Thank you for your replies. It is really hard for me to express myself verbally. Like most poets I do it much better in writing but than I'm never sure if I should give it to the person that it was intended for. So thank you everyone for your opinions. I will let you all know how it goes. |
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Mother_Earth Senior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 13701/2 year Texas & 1/2 year Michigan |
Lisann, welcome ! I haven't been here very long and have found it is a great place to try new things and to get answers to hard questions. You are not alone with your past. But you are on the right track in opening up to the world. It can be scarry, but you have made a giant step by finding a friend you want to open up to. Show her and keep the the lines of comunications open. This is beautiful and hope to see much more from you. Hugs, ME |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
Hey Laryalee. I am also from Canada. Man is the internet weird. You meet people from every part of the world. That is soooo cool. |
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