I Wanna Be First ( the poem's called Letting Go)

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hoot_owl_rn
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0 posted 2001-01-09 09:22 AM

Okay...a repost just because I wanted to be the first post in #12...Hey, I deserve to start off one of them

Letting Go

I let you go,
bit by bit,
as you slip through my fingers
falling in words on my paper.

My heart
still echoes your beat
as it once more tries to find
a rhythm of it’s own.

My body,
embedded with memories
of your touch,
remains fingerprinted
with the ink of your desire.

My lips
still taste your kisses
as you breathed life
into my soul.

My eyes close
only to see
every smile, every move
and they let you spill forth
in mirrors of liquid
upon my cheeks

as my mind
curses the photographic images
emblazoned there.

Yes, I’ll let you go,
bit by bit
....but perhaps not tonight.
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What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us.
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Irish Rose
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1 posted 2001-01-09 09:26 AM

I want the first reply!

Bravo!!

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

Kathleen

Wilfred Yeats
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2 posted 2001-01-09 09:34 AM

I can't be first - to post or reply - But I can proudly tell you I love this post - and will put it in my treasure box

kaile

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3 posted 2001-01-09 09:44 AM

an enjoyable read..esp enjoyed the line "fingerprinted with the ink of your desire"...wonderful image

Seymour Tabin
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4 posted 2001-01-09 10:08 AM

Hoot,
Glad you reposted, never read this and it's certainly worth reading. Excellent Sy

Kethry
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5 posted 2001-01-09 10:19 AM

Hoot_Owl_m,
This is definitely a first, first in style first in class, first to show the hour glass.
Loved it!
Keth

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Agust P
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6 posted 2001-01-09 10:27 AM

I liked this poem, very good, thanks, AP

Honeybee
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7 posted 2001-01-09 10:33 AM

Great images and thoughts, I'm sure we all can relate. Once again, this is a superior poem and you express it with that flair all your own. I relate very much to the last verse

Take care,
Melissa

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BloomingRose
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8 posted 2001-01-09 12:39 PM

Hold today, the memories of tomorrow.
Love this poem!
Deb

Sunshine

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9 posted 2001-01-09 12:41 PM

And indeed, sweet Ruth...you shall always be first! Well done, glad to see you posting, yours are always favored ones to read! {I was first once...what a thrill!]

Sven

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10 posted 2001-01-09 01:04 PM

yes you do. . . and what a way to begin!!!

great one Ruth!

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11 posted 2001-01-09 02:45 PM

My heart
still echoes your beat
as it once more tries to find
a rhythm of it’s own.

I love this stanza...it is so true...

beautiful write...*sigh*

I love the time
and in between
the calm inside me
in the space
where I can breathe...

Sarah McLachlan

hoot_owl_rn
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12 posted 2001-01-09 10:19 PM

Thanks everyone for your kind replies....this happens to rank amoung the favorites of all my poems although not written at one of the high points in my life.

(And sunshine....yeah, it's great to come in first for once

)

Martie

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13 posted 2001-01-09 10:44 PM

Ruth--It is wonderful to read your poetry, first, middle or last...loved this one!

Rex Allen McCoy
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14 posted 2001-01-09 11:44 PM

With top quality writing like this, I don't think anyone minds if you go first all the time Ruth

DonFurr
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15 posted 2001-01-10 12:33 PM

Delightful and stirring. A warm and wonderful thought. I will be watching closely for your work

tracie66
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16 posted 2001-01-10 05:51 AM

Hey Ruth you can go first anytime with a piece like this...well done, just beautiful and that ending superb
~HUGS~
Tracie~

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It is the harmony of the universe

startin_fresh
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17 posted 2001-01-10 07:20 AM

Very touching and true! We let go bit by bit. Sometimes it's truly hard to let someone go you've loved so dearly. Your poem expresses how it truly felt when I have had to let go.

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Nan

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18 posted 2001-01-10 07:26 AM

Not tonight, eh???.... I do love it - This is superb... and I'm glad you got here first ..

Happy days, my friend..

Marge Tindal

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19 posted 2001-01-10 07:39 AM

HootieGal~
Some great thoughts clustered in this piece.
Enjoyed the trickling of the memories.
~*Marge*~

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hoot_owl_rn
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20 posted 2001-01-10 10:11 AM

Once more...thanks to everyone for the nice comments and always for your continued support of my poety. Passions, my friends, and my family have given me back my voice and it's great to sing out once more

What lies behind us and lies before us are small matters compaired to what lies within us.
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CocoBaci
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21 posted 2001-01-10 01:42 PM

HOOT, it's my favorite of your's as it stands today and I'm elated to get this chance to thread into my library...
Thank you for sharing this splendid write
coco

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hoot_owl_rn
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22 posted 2001-01-15 09:36 AM

Thank you Coco

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