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Fading Into You..a Ballad
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Fading Into You..a Ballad |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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I sleep the night to dream your whispers, Your gentle touch of ocean eyes. Your masked marauding captures me, In all your worlds of shared disguise. To fade into your heart each night, To hold each beat then offered me. A promise felt in every way, From each caress, eternally. Secrets shared beneath the covers. Two enwrapped, in sweet retreat. Sighs exposing, treasures found, When nights silence enters deep. Come each morn, when light has broken, Memories reach to touch the pale. The guise, once more becomes the normal, Another dawning, to leave it's trail. A painted canvas breaks the silence, Eyes take in what hearts do bare. Widening the view, horizons, Opening new worlds to share. Secrets shared beneath the covers, Warmed by moonlight's blanket, soft. Stolen moments held in fullness, Dreaming whispers sent aloft.~~~~~ ~Wynter..I was challenged to a ballad..not sure if I succeeded  < !signature--> "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (edited 12-01-2000).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Oh my gosh!! I am not sure about the ballad for I know nothing of them but I know what sings to the heart and this is an exceptionally beautiful piece. Bravo!!!Well done. Much love to you from me Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This is beautiful...I believe I hear the song...it comes across softly... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
very lovely indeed Wynter..i have never written a ballad..you met the challenge very well.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This is stunning in its tenderness expressed on screen... I don't know much about different formats of writing but what I do appreciate is excellent writing... This is an exceptional write Wynter and it shall have it's place in my library...  Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-01-2000).] |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
A ballad? Don't know, but this is one beautifully written poem! I read this, instead of singing it, and I love music, but this one just flowed off the tongue with a soft, caressing flow. This is very, very, beautiful Enjoyed it much. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Startime-singing to your heart..what a wonderful response, thank you huggzz Karilea- softly is what I try for, thank you Sunny one ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Wynter....Do you mind if I send this to a special friend?...it describes a night we had perfectly If this does not come from your personal experience take it from me you hit the nail directly on the head in your description |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very beautiful, Wynter. Sandra |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Jeffrey- you may send it to your friend..it's a personal experience...maybe not fulfilled yet..but personal just the same...thank you for appreciating my words *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Wynter, this is very well done.. and yes makes a wonderful song.. I love the chorus... the flow and cadence are melodic very nice work jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Tara Simms Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 1244Honea Path, SC USA |
There's so much tenderness in this poem. Simply wonderful! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Victoria-I just copied BP's pattern elsewhere, I am always good at challenges Coco- I am delighted you enjoyed this enough to place on your library shelf thank you, C... I feel honoured ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
dragonpoe- such a delightful response thank youSandra- thank you for visiting Sandra, nice to see you {{huggzz}} jm- I am glad you enjoyed the chorus too, this is the first I tried. Tara- appreciate your kind words, thank you, all ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wynter....you did very well. The recurring chorus is a prime ingredient of a good ballad. I, for example, do not write ballads. Mine are more like narratives. I just didn't want to call myself the Narrateer!  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
You made me laugh Mr. Narrateer... and thank you for the comments~Wynter..giggling up the stairs "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wynter~ Such a softly flowing piece - truly a lilting tune. I like it ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
thank you Marge..a challenge on another site and a thought of fading into someone...brought me to this poem.. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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