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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas 
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how many times do I have to sit in front of a screen crying because I can feel the empty space behind me where someone should be saying come and let me hold you I because I need your touch as well. Searching and searching trying to find something or someone to fill a void that has eaten it’s way right to the middle of me through the other side where the breath of nobody whistles through making me curl inside myself to howl. If I had a tear for every person that loved me my well would be as dry as cracked earth found in the hell of loneliness and if I had a tear for every person that has looked the other way I would be dead from drowning in my own sadness. I’m sorry if I hold your hand too tightly or make you stay just a little bit longer then you want to, but a drowning woman sometimes pulls her savior under while trying to get free. This story is sad to tell and I have to type it first I fear for my tears stain the paper and blur the ink and this is one night that my howls will be heard. Sometimes there isn’t a way to end a poem when you don’t know where the end is and are afraid to find it for it may be the one you dreaded all along. .. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hello, lovie...and you are quite a poet m'friend! The title alone got me, and then your words just "wove" me in...I do understand the loneliness here..and you wrote it with a haunting beauty. I felt it, right "here" (serenity pounds her chest--grin) OUCH. Hugs.(carefully please?) LOL Love to you. Enjoyed this much. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
So I open this poem up today, and I surprised myself. There is some heavy stuff goin on there. Guess thats what I get for staying up past my bed time all by myself. Thanks 'renity. preciate it. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi there, Saxon Lady This poem screams, Lady - in many ways. The mournful verses go right to the heart. You are indeed a fine poet. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
LngJhn, It sure is screaming, I was screaming, or howling, whichever fits. As far as being a good poet, it's gotta be all the company round her rubbin off  "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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Robert Joseph Member
since 2000-10-07
Posts 491South Carolina |
This piece cuts deep...a soulful and introspective read. Thanks for sharing. Robert Joseph |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
It's kind of disturbing how introspective this was... Thanks Rob. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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Angel_of_Music Junior Member
since 1999-07-25
Posts 35Sanger, TX USA |
This looks like another poem in that different style you tried with Can't you write poetry for me. It works for you. Although, there were a few places I wanted to put punctuation. This read like it hurt, though, which is what I think you were going for. If so, you succeeded. "In sleep he sang to me...in dreams he came...that voice which calls to me, and speaks my name..." |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
You have spoken the heart of so many at one or more times in their lives. This is profoundly an epitome of depression and despair. The dryness of eyes, the wetness of eyes so succinctly expressed. Well done, Saxoness! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Angel and VAS, thank you both "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Repetitive comments are all of have, everyone already said it! But God, I know this horrible lonely feeling, and you expressed it so well. Peace. Sandra |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Nothing like purging an emotion to maek you cry. Crying is the cleansing of the soul. Thanks C. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Saxoness, The true depth of your sorrow metamorphs into the reader's own. I have been a "drowning woman" many times. I hope you will find peace. Much love, Elise |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Thanks Athena, nice to meet you as well "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." |
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