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Summer Surrenders- 3 Haikus
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Summer Surrenders- 3 Haikus |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments 
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~*These were written for my creative writing assignment...they all turned out to be about the end of summer and beginning of autumn, so here they are!*~ Strings of silver cloud Stream past the shimmering sun In a liquid flow. A lone crimson leaf Twirling upon dying branch Clinging fast to life. Dragonfly tumbles Falling through twilight shadows Onto wintered ground. *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Krista, may I like these a whole lot? Ahha! Thought so! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Dusk Treader
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Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 1187St. Paul, MN |
Beautiful haikus, my dear! Love that first one with the silver clouds and liquid flow... A+!  Abrahm Simons "I'm not sick, but I'm not well, and I'm so hot, cause I'm in Hell." - Harvey Danger |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Lovely!!! I give you an A+ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Krista~ This trio of Haiku is lovely and perfectly done. How vividly they color the season. Bravo, dear poet. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully done Krista! You've painted such vivid pictures in these few words, just lovely! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
Krista, Such lovely haiku snapshots, full of rich detail and meaning! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
such wonderful haikus.....they are given a great imagery, love them. Charisma |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
These are beautiful images. I think the second is my favorite, hitting cosest to the mark of haiku. The other two lack the characteristic "turn" or revelation in the third line, but each is a beautiful little poem. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Beautiful haikus, my friend. Few people have the talent to paint such images in so few words. Thanks for posting, my friend. "Where there is great love there are always miracles" -Cather "Love heals everything, and love is all there is"- Zukav |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Thank you all very much! *Krista Knutson* "One can never consent to creep when one feels an impulse to soar." Helen Keller |
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