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The Way You Beg...
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The Way You Beg... |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
My smile, you say transforms the gray into hot sizzling sun brightening the dark areas of life that frighten some and cause others to give up in dispair... My eyes, you say endless & deep, can cause the most hardened of hearts to melt into dripping surrender longing to swim if only once more in their tender innocence and remember forever... My skin, you say with it's own tantalizing flowery, sultry fragrance beckons even butterflies onto a collision course with me just to attempt a sample, a taste of pure magic My touch, you say is the true force behind electricity's shock, rocking the souls of the unwary, taking them to delirious heights of passion My love, you say is all that you ever needed to survive in this crazy sphere of a world where the only thing certain is uncertainty, and your love for me... Dearest lover, how I do love the way you beg... -Tier {R.T.} 10/00 [This message has been edited by Tiersdin (edited 11-29-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is absolutely lovely, breathtaking, but I have to admit I thought the last line was going to say "the way you LOVE" but I loved it, so poetic. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Tiersdin~ this is the most romantic begging I think I've ever heard..........*SIGH*.......  -SEA |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Irish Rose: You know, I'd actually toyed with that last line, but settled for tying in the title at the bottom. *smiles* you know how we poets are, you press send, then bite your nails! *chuckles* thanks for taking the time to read it, I truly appreciate it! SEA: Thank you so much! That's exactly what I was going for! *smiles* -Tier |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
perhaps, not so much in begging, as in ... speaking the truth? Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Hello Sunshine! Perhaps it's equal parts of both... pondering... *smiles* -Tier |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
She sounds healthy for your ego.Great poem,thanks. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
hi Tony, Thanks for reading and commenting. This poem was created with the words that my husband has spoken to me many times. I don't know if ego enters the picture, but I can honestly say that I never tire of recieving the compliments." *smiles* -Tier |
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PaulF Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 19 |
Beautiful words here, someone obviously thinks very highly of you. Paul |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Thank you, Paul, I like to think that this is the case. *smiles* -Tier |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Tiersden, A "Real Love Beg". Well done. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really neat poem...I couldn't understand the use of the beg...but with an explanation I understand...like the way it fit in...James |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Really neat poem...I couldn't understand the use of the beg...but with an explanation I understand...like the way it fit in...James |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
loved and enjoyed reading it....excellent penned. Charisma |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
My skin, you say with it's own tantalizing flowery, sultry fragrance beckons even butterflies onto a collision course with me just to attempt a sample, a taste of pure magic ================= My love, you say is all that you ever needed to survive in this crazy sphere of a world where the only thing certain is uncertainty, and your love for me... Dearest lover, how I do love the way you beg... =================== wonderful writing here... written from a unique point of view... excellent use of imagery, metaphor and comparisons love the butterfly colliding verse...very cool and unique very well done take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Daniel JD: Thank you for reading. That's exactly what it is, a love beg... and a very tender one at that... jm12345: I'm glad that you were finally able to understand what I meant. *smiles* thanks for taking the time on it. Charisma: Thank you for reading and commenting. I think most poets love to see the word "excellent" in connection with their works. Janet Marie: Thanks for the indepth appraisal of my poem. I'm not very good at giving such, so therefore I appreciate it that much more when I recieve it. *smiles* -Tier |
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