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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
She slipped the ring off her finger Placed it on his bedside stand Right there by his pager and his phone A single tear coursed down her cheek A final drop from rivers run dry By too many years of excuses and alibis There would be no more tomorrows Just many more lonely nights But those she had grown used to And she turned to say goodbye The shock upon his face Made her stumble in her tracks He never thought she'd leave And he wonders how to get her back I love you doesnt say all you need to hear For all the times I've left you lonely And crying bitter tears I never meant to hurt you or lose this love so sweet I'll do whatever it takes to keep you here I'm begging baby...please dont leave. That band of gold lies silent Upon his bedside stand A memory of love once held That he let slip right through his hands  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and it can happen that fast... you did yourself proud on this one Paula.... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
How heartbreakingly sad this is. Sometimes we do not realize the true value of something until we have lost it and often by then it is too late. I always hurt when someone's love comes to an end. Thank you so much for this read, my friend. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have experienced this point of no return...no matter what the other does it will not be enough...the opportunity has come and gone...James |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Paula~ you did a wonderful job expressing the heartache of when it is over......this is so sad......  -SEA |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Paula: This is so beautiful yet so sad. It's sad when it comes to this and it's even worst when something precious slips away because someone refused to see it at the time. I can really relate to this one. Thanks for sharing! kat |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Paula, It's so sad when it's over. Thanks for posting this and for bringing it full circle to resolution. Write on Kethry Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant - Thoreau |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It took courage to write and post this. If it is a personal situation, if not, that means you have much emphathy. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
this is an awesome, heartfelt poem.... excellent write. ((warm hugs)) Charisma |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula, this is utterly an amazing wonderful write from you. And how many of us have been there and done that. You have excelled yourself love, this is truly brilliant. I really love this one. Very well done. Take care Mushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Great piece here Paula...I like the way you compared the ring to how their love slpped away.....that was brilliant thinking...thanks for sharing! Nathan |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Excellent write, Paula! Great expression of the heart! Love it!! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Paula, You show deep emotions and such sadness here. I hurt all the way reading each and every line. I hope you are fine, please write, I'll listen. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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soozieque_28 Junior Member
since 2000-11-28
Posts 28Tennessee |
Tis is a great poem..It seems really personal. It is sad and heartbreaking, but I enjoyed it. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Paula...beautiful, sadly so, but wonderfully expressed. Heartbeats, my friend. jwesley |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sunshine...yes in the blink of an eye...or the beat of a heart...thank you Startime...sometimes we get all wrapped up in outside things and forget whats really important in life...thank you James...yes my sweet friend...sometimes there isnt a tomorrow...we tend to forget that...thanks Sea...I think goodbye is one of the worst kinds of sad...especially when its an unnecessary goodbye...thank you Kat...when we take something for granted we tend to forget just how precious it truly is...thank you Kethry...is pain ever really resolved or do we just bury it so deep we can pretend to forget? Thank you sweet friend Irish Rose...mayhaps a little of both...thank you Charisma...thank you for the hugs and the sweet words Marsha...you are a constant source of encouragement and delight for me...with your sweet wonderful words...there is a new KNIGHT on the horizon dear one... Nathan...for a woman taking off her ring is very symbolic...it is that last bit of hope gone...thank you sp...thank you so much Daniel...I am fine my friend and I did write...yes its sad...goodbyes usually are tho...thank you Soozieque...it is personal...and I'm glad you enjoyed it...thank you Jimmy...from my heart to yours thank you |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Hi Paula, Yeah, I'm awake too. This is pretty heartfelt and I thought I should tell you so. love ya poetess dale |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Paula great poem and story and I can see how it could happen very easily...you can't take the things you love for granted it never works good stuff!! kiddo ......ethome |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Dale...dont you sleep either? I appreciate that you took the time to read and respond and that you FELT this...love ya too ethome...thanks sweet poet man...trust me I will never take you for granted...you are too special for that Ignore those who would clip your wings...fly ever upward...even if it means scorched wings |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Paula- wow..such deep heartache in this piece. you've expressed it well. excellent write... ~vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Vicky...thank you...goodbyes can be heartbreaking |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Perfectly written to show your message. I'm an incurable romantic and I want so much for there to be something he can do to change the decision. No not just words, but actions. I wonder so what he must have done, what pain he must have caused that his words, that seemed so true, could not be true enough. This poem was like a song that has been cut off by the power going out...the unfinished resolution hangs in the air, screaming to occur...like the ring at the bottom of this piece keeps spinning, yet never coming to a rest...for no rest is possible...the pain, the longing, will not rest. I ache from the read. I ache. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
VAS...Oh I just love your reply...you saw so much in this poem...all the pain and the futility and the hope...can he get her back? I dont know...can she ever trust him to change? I dont know... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
--------------------------------------------- And he wonders how to get her back I love you doesnt say all you need to hear For all the times I've left you lonely And crying bitter tears That band of gold lies silent Upon his bedside stand A memory of love once held That he let slip right through his hands --------------------------------------------- PAULA, this one hurts... I read your poem twice and I wonder can one just walk away and put that ring on shelf even though streams of tears and lonely cool breeze of night is what is left of her heart to feel... Can a heart that loves like this which feels such emotion truly move on from the emptiness of hurt his shadow has left her... Hmmmm ya got me pondering about this way too much but then again thinking is good when hurt needs to be let go...coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-07-2000).] |
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