Open Poetry #11 |
What Lies Beneath |
Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
What Lies Beneath Rambling falsehoods of radiance Should mirror mimic foolish lies Verifying the ignorant illusion Glimpsing the made up face It hides the one God gave Seeing not the diamonds But the dirt that surrounds Missing the halo of gem That the far- sighted can not see As clean hands merely brush surface Yet my shadow, my silent witness Sees through what should be obvious And holds you on highest pedestal For picturesque beauty is not in reflection It glows below skin and cell Shimmering the aura from heart It is what lies beneath Marina Nov 28/2000 It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yet my shadow, my silent witness Sees through what should be obvious And holds you on highest pedestal For picturesque beauty is not in reflection It glows below skin and cell Shimmering the aura from heart It is what lies beneath ================= hey you...so nice to see your name here and way cool poem girlie... your muse is getting all cryptic and wise on us many truths here my friend... it tis what lies beneath that matters ... well done poet later-lovely aura gator jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, must agree with Janet... very cryptic musings here... Very interesting write... James |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I desire this glow...James |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marina~ I think this is wonderful..... "For picturesque beauty is not in reflection It glows below skin and cell Shimmering the aura from heart It is what lies beneath" So true! -SEA |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Marina-This took my breath away, this was very beautiful! |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Me too! Agree with JM that is. Interesting and enjoyable read. jwesley |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Marina~ Hello, dear friend! It has been a while hasn't it? I must tell you, my dear, I love this poem. It is one of the best that I have read in quite a while. you always touch my heart with your words, dear! One thing I know is that your heart rings true! Love Ya!~ ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Jan, thank you. You know how difficult it is for me to write these days. I so much appreciate your support and your help. James, it is quite a bit different for me. Perhaps too many mixed emotions layely. Thanks for the support. James, don't we all. Thank you, my friend. Sea, thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed it. Gemini, thank you. I hope you have your breathe back now! Jwestly, thank you so much. When all else fails...just agree with JM. LOL Terry, what can I say, my friend. You know I always love it when you pop in. You always leave me with a smile my sweet friend. Promise to e-mail soon! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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Martinque Member
since 2000-05-17
Posts 69 |
A very interesting read indeed. Makes one stop and think. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
If I may? It is indeed what lies beneath. . . and it takes a special someone to see beyond. . . and know the heart. . . This is an excellent poem. . . one of your best. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A walk on the deep side with you This is excellent writing Marina and gives me a moment to pause and feel your words and take them to heart...what lies beneath...that is truly where what matters lies...always a joy to see you posting!! The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
I have to agree with Martinque. It does make you stop and think. Not only of what lies beneath the one that you're speaking of, but of what lies beneath your own surface. Wonderful Marina. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Marina this is just superb work. You should really submit this one to the main site. A very interesting and thoughtful read, well constructed with great "flow" to it!!! As you can tell, smiles, I enjoyed this one tremendously...hugs, and more of the same, if that is not too greedy of me? |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Marina! Denise |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you all for replies!! Please excuse my being so vague in my reply. I haven't been very well lately and so it is off to bed for me again. Thanks all again, you comments and compliments mean a great deal to me! Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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