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A Certain Degree of Attitude
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A Certain Degree of Attitude |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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A Certain Degree of Attitude Here I go again on that wind of road the one with the precipice on one side and the sharp rocks on the other you know the one where the road crew can’t reach cause fixing this one takes courage and a certain degree of attitude So this is the one I’m on you see and I have stopped at this hair pin curve and I can’t really see if anything is coming but I know there is only room for me if I’m careful so I gather myself together but I find I cannot slither around these rocks they are sharp and I’m bleeding fear So I close my eyes and I remember how my father taught me to cross a river on the rocks it takes a straight back and a sure foot and an attitude and you just do it like you were not in danger of tumbling into a raging current you do it with a meadow of grass below you and your father’s smile |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Girlfriend ! I LIKE your attitude !  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
I find I cannot slither around these rocks they are sharp and I’m bleeding fear =========================================== beautiful imagery! Hope you don't keep your eye closed too long  < !signature-->Live for love. Without love, you don't live. [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 11-28-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great attitude! I especially loved your closing lines, touched my heart, it did! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i know all to well about bleeding fear... I can do it with attitude too.... but around here they call it PMS  very cool lessons learned and use of metaphors and memories so wise are you jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Martie* Fantastic weaving once again my friend...this held such fabulous imagery and as I read I could hear my father's voice telling me how to cross that path...and you are so very right...it takes attitude...something I never leave home without  Excellent writing!!The best and most beautiful things in the world cannot be seen or even touched ---- they must be felt with the heart~ *??* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Wise and wonderful poetry. *L* SY |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--and I like YOURS! Interloper--No...they are wide open..thank you. Denise-I am always happy when I have touched a heart, especially yours. Janet--You have one of the best attitudes. Butterflies--I'm glad you got the same attitude lessons as I. Sy--I'm always happy when I get a reply from you...thank you! |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
two things i'm starting to notice particulary about your poetry - you're excellence with extended meataphor and satisfying closures. This poem is just woderful as an insight into the difficult moments of life and how we can overcome them successfully ... did i say you had talent btw? ...lol well ya have... i think i preferred this to the music one though ...dunno why ..i just did P |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Martie- When my attitude is less than it should (or could) be - I need only read one of your masterpieces. Once more I feel the need to remind you - Publish a book of your word! The world NEEDS to read you! |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Marty-Thank you so much for reminding me of my fathers smile, I am feeling like you hugged me with your words and shed a tear at the same time. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Philip--It always pleases me when one of my poems pleases you...thanks for saying the talent thing, by the way... Bill--I don't know if the world needs to read me...(blush), but I do know that I need to write...thank you, my friend. Gemini--I am so glad I hugged you with my words...here's another one {{{{{{{{{Hug}}}}}}}} |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, loud applause, oh this is one really fabulous. I think it's one of your best, truly excellant work. I love it Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Martie, this is a great piece of positivity...continue to keep your winning ways! Nathan |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marsha--bowing to your loud applause--thanks oh mushy one! Nate--Positivity...oh, I like that...thanks! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
If you were to teach the world then the world would be nothing but rainbows and meadows of spring color. Lordy my friend, I so wish that I could carry your mind and eyes with me everyday all day. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'and you just do it like you were not in danger of tumbling into a raging current you do it with a meadow of grass below you and your father’s smile' Excellent writing, Martie! Love these lines! sp 'cause I am hanging on every word you say, and, even if you don't want to speak tonight, that's alright, alright with me... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--If you were to do that, then you wouldn't be the wonderful man that you are...thanks for such a sweet reply. Snowpants--Thanks for the excellent, and for letting me know your favorite lines...alway appreciate that. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, this is SO right! Attitudes are everything....many times the difference between success and failure....so are father's smiles |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--I'm sorry I didn't respond to you earlier, so I'm shamlessly bringing this back up to say..you are right, because I was thinking of my father's smile and how proud he'd be of mine...thank you! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Wonderful phrasing and such words that stick with the reader, good job, Martie, very well written. What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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