Open Poetry #11 |
Life's Reflection |
Mereel79 New Member
since 2000-11-27
Posts 8Milwaukie, OR, USA |
A lifetime spent watching you grow up through my eyes You're good mornings and your good evenings, your hello's and good-byes To look at you now with nothing at all to show It makes me so sick, I wish I could just get up and go But no I must stay, I can never leave your side In your shadow I will try to hide Can't get a job, can't find a girl Can't find the path that will take you into the world I don't know what keeps you here I don't know what makes you stay It would be so nice for you to just vanish and go away But this will never happen due to shear terror I will just watch you as many times as you look into any mirror -I never consider myself much of a writer, just an outlet for myself I guess. A heart of a poet is what I always say, even if I am the only one to enjoy my works, it will be worth it. My form will hopefully get better in time, it's still only my second poem ever written.- |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
The bare honesty in this is outstanding. I applaud. If this is your only your second poem I can't wait to see more!!!!! Welcome......I truly enjoyed. You have a definite gift for writing....... To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
You show wonderful talent in these hearfelt words, my friend. I would love to read more. Thank you so very much for the read. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. [URL=http://path2riches.com]http://path2riches.com |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Welcome to our world...the only definition of a poet is the one you make for yourself...this is very well written and very powerful...and yes you do learn and grow the more you write...so keep writing ok? |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this was wonderful and i really liked the style. welcome to passions. in my opinion, any time a person writes from their heart or is expressing them selves through words, that is poetry and this is POETRY, good poetry in fact. you 2nd only? WOW. You should see my first works hehe. Seriously, keep writing, and stay here at Passions. This place is full of a lot of wonderful people. Looking forward to reading more from you. Take care. ~amy~ |
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Mereel79 New Member
since 2000-11-27
Posts 8Milwaukie, OR, USA |
It means a lot to hear all the words people are saying. Thank you all.< !signature--> And now I'm glad I didn't know The way it all would end the way it all would go Our lives are better left to chance I could have missed the pain But I'd of had to miss the dance [This message has been edited by Mereel79 (edited 11-27-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Welcome to Passions. Here, you will find just about anything to encourage you to write. There is critique for those who really want to get serious, or just pour your heart out, I know I've never been disappointed here, and I hope you aren't either! What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life. Walt Whitman |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is an outstanding effort... you show a depth of need to expell these emotions... and your expressions are indeed emotive ... for me the release that comes in writing out these feeling is the only reason I started writing ... somewhere to go with the intensity... I am very impressed with this...and in the fact you say its only the second one youve wrote.. it is an excellent early effort... and a far cry above the "beginners poetry" I wrote early on... I see much poetic potential...I hope you will continue to write... and as I did .. you will find many avenues of growth and inspiration here in this special place. Welcome to passions... next time you look in the mirror ... say hello to the poet take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Let me start by saying Welecome here to Passions. Next let me say never under estimate your writting. When writing from the heart and soul there never is any thing bad about it. Pat yourself on the back. This poem I did enjoy reading. Look forward to more |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Welcome to passions....and I really enjoyed your poem... you have expressed your feelings very good. Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Only one person besides me has ever read my earliest efforts... and I'm not sure whether that could be called trusting or torturing. LOL. Keep writing... and welcome! *S* |
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