Open Poetry #11 |
Ocean of Lies |
Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
"Ocean of Lies" Can you not see the pain you cause her Or is it simply that you do not care The weight of your sins and shame She can no longer bare Quietly I've stood in the shadows But now it's time I had my say Your actions speak louder than your words And for that you shall pay I am not here to judge But you break her heart time and time again As if her life is some sort of game That you play, wanting to win She is your daughter Yet you treat her so cold And I'm really tired of just watching This is way past being old I know you think I'm nothing And I am just talking to a wall I am only trying to warn you Before you trip and take your final fall The lies you have told her Are slowly ripping her apart You are not only destroying her soul But you are tearing out her heart If the light in her eyes ever goes out I shall never forgive you She is more precious than you will ever know You seriously have no clue You cast your sins and shame upon her And use her like a pawn I should have seen this was happening Been going on for so very long I don't pretend to understand the whys Some things are just meant to be But I promise you one thing From these chains she will be released, and her soul will fly free Your game stops here and now She is your daughter, not some pawn to use Plain and simple I will no longer tolerate this abuse My mother is gone, never to come back You have no idea what you're throwing away Take a look into her eyes, you'll see her beauty I do each and every single day |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Amy, this is so so brilliant, utterly wonderful. I really love this, it is full of power. It is full of your determination to sieze control back from those who have been abusing their power. Such a good write from you, utterly wonderful. Great work Amy girl. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is full of anger, good, you got it out, keep writing. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Amy~ give her hell and make her take it!! This is really a fantastic poem from you.....anger isn't always bad........ -SEA |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'If the light in her eyes ever goes out I shall never forgive you She is more precious than you will ever know You seriously have no clue' Aimsters--wow! This is extremely powerful. My friend, you have expressed yourself wonderfully here. Excellent write! sp ô¿ô w I won't go, I won't sleep, I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
Amy: This is extremely powerful and full of emotions. I hope the light in her eyes never goes out. Great poem. Loved it! kat |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Amy, Powerful, strong and courageous, you have it all. Great to see you standing up to an obvious problem. I am here to listen, come to me anytime, remember. Beautiful poem. "Quietly I've stood in the shadows But now it's time I had my say" Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a powerful intense read..thank you for sharing(that must have been hard to write) and i do hope you will have strength and corage to do as you deem fit |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Marsha- your kind words brought tears to my eyes. thank you my friend. you are heaven sent take care. Irish Rose- I intend to. I have many more feelings than just anger regarding this situation that I need to get out in the "open". Thank you for reading and responding! SEA- LOL at your comment. She deserves some hell that's for sure. And yes very true. Sometimes anger is a good thing, it's all in how you handle it. Thanks for your response. Kris- well eeksters coming from you i take what you said as a very high compliment. i'm glad you enjoyed this. ô¿ô take care my sweet friend. kat- thank you. I hope it never does either. she's my one true soul mate and means the world to me. appreciate your kind reply. Daniel- thank you my friend for your support and words of encouragement. it means so very much to me. Kaile- I thank you for your wonderful comment about this poem. And yes I do think I have the strength to make it through this. Thanks again! Take care all. Love ya much... ~amy~ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
nicely written amy ..as always.. a sad poem indeed..i hope they can work things out one day.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
Victoria-- thanks for reading & responding! i hope they can too. *crossing fingers*. Take care. ~amy~ |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Amy, this is touching and sad as you know already and it's also a great write from your heart and mind onto this screen I look at tonite... Me wants 2 send U Hugggggggggggz cus I think you're a sweet friend and please keep on writing PoetLady... Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 12-14-2000).] |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
coco~ how sweet of you to bring this back up! and thank you ever so much for your touching reply. i got a huge smile on my face now. take care *hugs* ~amy~ ~A true friend is one soul in two bodies~ |
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