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Dawn... rewritten as a sonnet
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Dawn... rewritten as a sonnet |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Cool is the whisper of breezes at dawn, Smell of sweet jasmine, angelic bouquet, The kiss of morn's dew, on emerald green lawn, Soft glow of sun's rising, advent of new day. Verdant the meadow, in morning's begin, Darkness retreating, onslaught of the sun, Songbirds awaken, commencing day's din, Helios the victor, of warmth does forerun. The beauty of dawning, spreads 'cross the land, Alone in the distance, no jewel can compare, A vision of wonder, as touched by Sun's hand, A single primrose, pure beauty so rare. First rays of the morning, lone primrose encase, Splendor of nature, in dawning's embrace. Awaken thee as dark of night is swept, From sky by whispered hush of dawn's first breath, Lets loose new day, o'er distant mountain kept, 'Neath firmament of heaven's spacious breadth. As evening's stars, in evanescence flee, Before advancing light of Helios' reign, Recedes the tide of night's celestial sea, Exposing mountain peak and verdant plain. Begone the cloak of midnight's ebon skies, Feathered hymnists, as nature's minstrels sing, In heralding, advent of day's reprise, In splendored awe, to us doth dawning bring. The sun, and wind, and rain, arise and greet, As comes the dawn, champion of night's defeat. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i rooted for dawn throught this here fine sonnet coupling and woohoo she won!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Cool is the whisper of breezes at dawn, Smell of sweet jasmine, angelic bouquet, The kiss of morn's dew, on emerald green lawn, Soft glow of sun's rising, advent of new day. Verdant the meadow, in morning's begin, Darkness retreating, onslaught of the sun, Songbirds awaken, commencing day's din, ================= Awaken thee as dark of night is swept, From sky by whispered hush of dawn's first breath, Lets loose new day, o'er distant mountain kept, 'Neath firmament of heaven's spacious breadth. As evening's stars, in evanescence flee, Before advancing light of Helios' reign, Recedes the tide of night's celestial sea, Exposing mountain peak and verdant plain. Begone the cloak of midnight's ebon skies, Feathered hymnists, as nature's minstrels sing, In heralding, advent of day's reprise, In splendored awe, to us doth dawning bring. The sun, and wind, and rain, arise and greet, As comes the dawn, champion of night's defeat. ============ To witness sonnet next to thy name ... is a promise to be swept. Upon mine eyes inhale of thy words, thy sonnets promise now kept For no matter what the gift, be it songs of morns dawn or thy love the rose, Thou words are like a melody these lovely sonnets and poems you compose  another exquisite sonnet from your gifted pen... another jewel for my treasure box.. and another bad case of sonnet/poet envy  take care jm |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Simply exquisite! You, my friend, are a poet!! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
thank you for the replies... walt... I hope dawn wins...or tis going to be a long night... Janet Marie... you are much to gracious in your replies... glad you enjoyed. Martie... thank you ever so much my friend... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Beautiful sir!!! I love your sonnets.... William must be so jealous!  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
If I had a jealous bone in my body it would be on fire now....I've always wanted to write one of these..along with ballads but I must confess I've not had the time nor the concentration as of late to do so...this is truly stunning Mike...the flow and the beauty of this rains down like diamonds from a moon lit night...absolutely exquisite!!! You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Breathtakingly beautiful, as always, Mike! Denise |
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