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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
I'm home for the holidays But my family has disappeared Empty smiles and hollow laughter Are all you hear Egg shells are all around So much we avoid Maybe I have been gone too long Hard to tell when it all went wrong My father's name a dirty word So much I scream thats not heard The things I try to show no one sees All this pain I hide in me The table's set, dinner's served Somehow it all feels absurd They set a place for me but I'm not here I drift back to when we were all here There are empty places now No way to fill I eat this meal like a bitter pill So alone but no one sees All I have are memories I would like to thank att of those that hav welcomed me and given ththeir encouagement |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
You are 2 for 2 bttrfly keep em coming  |
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DreamSeeker Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 72 |
There was no turkey no table set not even a falsified sense of family community Grandfather HospitalBound Is Dying Mother Too Ill Father Bed-Ridden I spend the day Cleaning Lungs Eruptions In So Sterile Setting Trying To Ease Pain Reminding What Family Is Not Dead Is Dying Before My Eyes And I Can Only Wipe The Mess Reassure That Grandmother Is Waiting For You I Too Remember TimesGoneBy The One I Love SO Far So Far From This BlackSheeps Eyes See The Ending Of So ManyLives As The Ice Comes Knowing This IS The Last NonHomeComing And More FeelingsOverrideDerideMe Reaching I Understand I Must Make This Place Called Home I Fall The Song That Is Soul It Reaches Defiant Giving It In And Given Calling All Souls Rise |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
raleigh- great poem you have penned here! this was sad but i enjoyed it nontheless. i would like to welcome you to passions, and i look forward to reading more from you. take care. ~amy~ p.s are you from raleigh nc by chance? i use to live in cary is why i ask. |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
Thank you amister, and yes i live in Raleigh and hav lived in Cary to. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
nice job butterfly i really enjoyed the read! |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hi there, i liked the matter-of -fact tone you use here...makes this poem effective to this reader... But my family has disappeared There are empty places now No way to fill So alone but no one sees Direct and straight-to-the-point, your bluntness makes me feel the hurt even more keep posting  |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
Walt thanks for reading, glade you liked it. Kaile, thanks for the complament.  |
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Irie Senior Member
since 1999-12-01
Posts 1493Washington State |
I felt mixed emotions flow from this as I read. Also felt a sense of sadness. Seems the Holidays bring a small bit of turmoil and bitter sweet memories. I hope your Holidays are bright RB. Powerful and emotion filled piece.... ~Sheri "The things that come to those that wait may be the things left by those who got there first" |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Another butterfly...join the butterfly clan raleigh... Great job here - lots of impact, I could feel that pain through your words. Hugs K |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
This is indeed a painful read...hugs to you for this one, I know this feeling well. An excellent portayal of a haunted holiday. |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
Yes, family strife can be VERY painful. I know how you feel. I wrote something similar in my poem "Divorce", although it was about family strife from the perspective of young children. Good poem here. I hope that something ignights a spark of love in your family, and that joy comes again to your house. |
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raleighbttrfly Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 160Raleigh NC |
Thank you all for reading and replying. This was writen after Thanksgiving dinner.A vary plesent one to be honest, but whene only half your family is there it seems that the other half is on your mind. Serenity you said it well, thank you Severn a butterfly clan??? Agine thanks for the support and i want all of you to know that I am looking forward to Christmas |
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Elizabeth Cor Senior Member
since 2000-10-13
Posts 879Over the river and through the woods |
Oh, sheesh, I can relate to this... I hope your Christmas is a little better, raleighbttrfly! ~ Beth |
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