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NIghtwood (my only sonnet)
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NIghtwood (my only sonnet) |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
There is a quiet in the winter wood, A strange dark beauty in pine forest things - The nightbirds that rise on shadowy wings ANd the phantom trees in their solitude. The moon, moth white, lingers there motionless, Then leans like a lover to kiss the lake. She touches the surface as if to wake The still, dark water with her light caress. There is a quiet in the midnight wood, Yet in the sacred silence, still the sound Of wood creature watching from limb and ground To keep their sanctuary's solemn mood. I watch with them in worship and in awe, Then whisper a prayer before I withdraw. [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 11-25-2000).] |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Yikes! buried on the second page without a single read! |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
Yes,I'm surprised this was ignored,but response isn't always proportional to a poem's quality.Personally,I thought this was wonderfully written and quite enchanting.And you got all the meter and syllables thing right as well. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Thank you Tony, I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment!  |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Beki, this is quite a piece of work for being your only sonnet! Of course, from you, I expect nothing less ...  A few stumbles in the meter, and an itty-bitty missing syllable in line 5, but then who's counting..? I find that the most remarkable thing in this, as in ALL of your lovely poetry, is your absolute mastery of exquisite and captivating imagery: The moon, moth white, lingers motionless, Then leans like a lover to kiss the lake. SHe touches the surface as if to wake The still, dark water with her light caress Tres magnifique! --Linda Remember: maintaining a positive attitude may not solve all your problems, but it will certainly annoy enough people to make it worth the effort. |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
Hello Skyfyre, it has been a long while since our paths crossed, my friend...how good to "see"you! Actually I have to say "oops"..should read "lingers THERE motionless" missed a word when I typed Thanks for catchingit I will edit it immediately! And thanks for your generous comment. I wrote this poem when I lived on a lake in south carolina...the only good that came from that 9 months was how close I was to nature there, and how my feel for imagery matured. It will always be the greatest gift for my poetry [This message has been edited by Beki (edited 11-25-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Beki! The picture you paint with your words is breathtaking!! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The moon, moth white, lingers there motionless, Then leans like a lover to kiss the lake. She touches the surface as if to wake The still, dark water with her light caress. There is a quiet in the midnight wood, Yet in the sacred silence, still the sound Of wood creature watching from limb and ground To keep their sanctuary's solemn mood. I watch with them in worship and in awe, Then whisper a prayer before I withdraw. ============= this is excellent.. the imagery had a very cool mystic essence to it ... "The moon, moth white, lingers there motionless, Then leans like a lover to kiss the lake." very cool line...superb imagery ... and those last two lines were a poetically perfect ending to this poems slightly haunted grace. very well done take care jm |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Beki, excellent write. I wouldn't worry about starting off on page two, I usually manage to get to page four before I get responses. For me it's a timing "thang". Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
DEnise, Janet, Kethry, thank you for your generous comments, I appreciate them bunches! |
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