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Timeless Capsule (Leave your comments before it's time)
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Timeless Capsule (Leave your comments before it's time) |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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I dedicate to my friends of the far off age When all war will cease and only passion will rage A timeless capsule carrying the antiquated The ever scurried capture of all things fated The stars now let loose the light shined for their eyes May they still hear the lingering of our lover’s sighs Will they eat, will they drink, and buried in their bones Will they still cry the vast sadness of feeling alone They journey to the stars and pen the earthshine wonder Will the green meet the gloom of the moon torn asunder The dismal disease wafts into the atmosphere Will love in the air thus be something to fear When you my far off friends of new generations Walk the sandy beaches of undivided nations Think not of me, but your friends of the far off age When all war will cease and only passion will rage [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 11-22-2000).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Walk the sandy beach of undivided nations." Fabulous message and a worthy goal...James |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
A doubt about the “perfection” of the distant future eh walt? well thought out message my friend, I’m itching to reach for the critique button but there’s this kinda lock on it labelled “insecurity”.........~grin~ good writing WB Philip |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
to think that timelessness is held within these walls forever to lift, forever to enthrall such is poetry curtseying to you, Sir! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thank you all I was inspired by the inside cover of a Beatle album where they were talkin bout the year 2000 smokin children on Saturn yuh i was just there hehe |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Wonderful poem. Enjoyed the read. Poeminister |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Awesome, Walt! Many intriguing thoughts here. Sandra |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks catalina and poe much appreciated! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"A timeless capsule carrying the antiquated The ever scurried capture of all things fated" "When you my far off friends of new generations Walk the sandy beaches of undivided nations" Exceptional Walt, in all venues ... wonderfully worded in language, beautiful futuristic imagery, and such a powerful message ... really enjoyed this treasure Walt, nicely done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanks kit, what you had to say means alot to me! |
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elisaseyes Member
since 1999-07-15
Posts 196fort worth texas |
you took me there in wonderful imagery |
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Mattster Junior Member
since 2000-11-17
Posts 29 |
wayoutwalt, Seems like you have an amazing talent, and there's a lot of poetic energy in you waiting to be released. Imagine what the quality of your poetry will be like in a few years. Rock on. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
thanky misses E Mattster yuh I look at the posts from when i started here and I see how much i've evolved thus far so yes I am looking forward to years to come. thank you |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
"When all war will cease and only passion will rage" Walt, you certainly know how to spin a tale. You know, it has a rather mystical quality, this piece. And speaking of quality, you've written this with an eloquence befitting any star bard that I can think of. How very fascinating, this concept and the way your words beckon to those in our far away time, penning "earthshine wonder." I really enjoyed this journey, thank you ~ Rainy |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Good show Walt!! Refreshing to read a poem that speaks of the future in a positive way instead of in such a foreboding manner as many would tend to describe it.....like it!! Yeah!...................ethome |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
rainy and homey thank you so muchly |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Walt, I really dig the sentiments expressed in this one. However, I fear I shan't be partaking of a time capsule, either for myself or others for one small reason: I can never remember where I buried the blased thing.  |
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