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Me In Me |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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This-- this is the final verse-- the venial the words of terse... lips that hunger empty purse... denial undenied... a hearse, arriving... I leave you the curse of yet another stillborn love, potential...dies... to soar above who wears the one hand white heart glove? Lonely, lonely, rise above.... YOU-- I gave my heart askance as if I ever had a chance... I can't... I can't... no room for hurt... I cry. I cry. and scrape the dirt in search of speck of one thing worth to plant the seed of me in me... I trade it all... (there was a list...) you were there with Judas kiss YOU a spark compassion's bliss... (you) the only,I will miss... and only drop my heart will bleed... You were the dirt, you were the seed... and you are the rain I need... but I will not drop to my knees... the sun? he comes to shine on me. and I trade for me...in me. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wonderful poem Serenity....great analysis of inner feelings ...and hey I understand!... you end up trusting yourself and leaning on the wisdom of past experiences....this is so well written Serenity .....very insightful and deep.....keep it up Celeste......ethome |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Once again your words flow through me with such feeling! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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LilPeanut Junior Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 26Pennsylvania, USA |
sorry posted twice see below! [This message has been edited by LilPeanut (edited 11-22-2000).] |
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LilPeanut Junior Member
since 2000-11-21
Posts 26Pennsylvania, USA |
This poem is written with great style. I could feel every ache the character was feeling. I love poems like this that sink you in and you beg to read more. Excellent Job! Have a wonderful day!  Kelly |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I leave you the curse of yet another stillborn love, potential...dies... to soar above who wears the one hand white heart glove? Lonely, lonely, rise above.... YOU-- I gave my heart askance as if I ever had a chance... ================== and scrape the dirt in search of speck of one thing worth to plant the seed of me in me... =================== (you) the only,I will miss... and only drop my heart will bleed... You were the dirt, you were the seed... and you are the rain I need... but I will not drop to my knees... the sun? he comes to shine on me. and I trade for me...in me. ================ oh my sweet...I know, I know... you know me motto ... tis never easy ...being a moth ... but you bleed like a butterfly baby .. and ya know me other motto ( i gotst a million of em)  I am ALWAYS my own worst enemy but ya know what else I know ... there already is a seed planted in "the me" of you ... and everythings comming up poetry baby... you are poetry...whether it rains or not... sun .. or none... there is a rose garden growing there in the "me of me" ..in you.. *blowing kisses to the south* love you me twin..muchly me |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
sen I am always glad when I am done reading your posts o yuh I love the Judas part woohoo the whole poem rocks yuh |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
this.....soars...... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
a window to the soul my friend. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Back again to express my gratitude...Your replies of kindness continue to amaze and uplift me. I don't believe that I would have kept writing if I had not found this forum. I humbly thank you all again. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Wow! Excellent poem here! You also have a way with finding the perfect words. Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Got the point very quickly. Well done! I love the quickness to my reading of this, moved so fast and flowed wonderfully! (I don't like the use of "hearse," though, it seems like it is used so often when trying to bring in death, just clicheish to me.) Love your work. |
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