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Kiss.....Senryu
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Kiss.....Senryu |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Kiss... Senryu We kiss and kiss more as we go up and down in the elevator |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
That was a short trip! You definitely put a smile on my face, since I wasn't sure where you were taking me. Heh-heh, I like where this ended up. Very clever and cute if you don't mind it being cute. |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
hmmm, i thought senryu is in the form of 5-7-5 syllable count... nonetheless, this left me with a smile  |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
VAS --thanks for stopping by to read. Glad you liked. Kaile--Thankyou for your comment. Aren't the syllables ok...?? I don't think they're supposed to have any rhyme either. I guess I just can't resist breaking the rules sometimes  [This message has been edited by Poeminister (edited 11-22-2000).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Take your finger off the up and down button...I need to get to the eleventeenth floor... such a charming picture... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Sunshine--Glad you enjoyed. Thanks for your comment. |
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