Naked Soul In Pieces (Senryu & Poem)

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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2001-01-08 06:25 PM

NAKED SOUL SENRYU
5-7-5

Emotions stripped bare
leaving soul vulnerable
to be raped of heart

*By Melissa Honeybee*

~Naked Soul In Pieces~

You came,
with a promising smile,
a tall, dark and handsome gallant knight
upon that proverbial white horse
and saved me from a lonely confusion,
you gave my heart a reason to pump love through my veins
then suddenly, without warning
you fell to your hunger,
forced me down
and stole my womanhood
as you ripped my heart from my chest
and poured it into your blender,
without an ounce of decency
or compassion
you diced my heart in two
slowly yet savagely
with the dull, jagged blade
as it crushed my aspirations and innocence
through cycles
of grate
and grind,
then you stopped for only a breath's passing
to throw cubes of ice in
and laughed as your finger pressed firmly upon shred
to mix my fear thoroughly with the tears
as the icy chill pervaded,
leaving a heart drained,
liquified,
you drank of my soul,
devoured all of me
and when you were through with the taste
you wiped your mouth clean
closed the lid
and left me alone
with emotions stripped bare,
vulnerable, in pieces
to be raped of heart again

*By Melissa Honeybee*
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The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (edited 01-08-2001).]

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

1 posted 2001-01-08 06:41 PM

Melissa, this is very powerful. I know this feeling well. Good work.

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

2 posted 2001-01-08 06:53 PM

WOW! Powerful. Solid. Painful. This I truly liked. Definitely your best, as far as I'm concerned. Many accolades; much applause!

jwesley

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

3 posted 2001-01-08 08:06 PM

Melissa,

these poems are so full of emotion. . . scary to think of where they came from. . . excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

4 posted 2001-01-16 04:05 PM

Elizabeth and jwesley - Thank you! Although not penned from my own experience, I was there to see and feel the emotions that my mom was feeling

Sven - I wrote these in honour of my mom's relationship with my father long ago

The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams

Rindercella
Member

since 1999-11-12

Posts 64
La La Land

5 posted 2001-01-17 07:37 PM

Melissa Honeybee
This is an intense collection of your thinking.
i am glad to have a chance to read it
You have a good grasp of the emotions of writing.
i wish nothing but good things for you and your mother.

*If the shoe fits ... the castle is yours*

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