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Open Poetry #11

Feel

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

0 posted 2001-01-07 12:31 PM

Feel

Breathe in, now exhale
You must or else you fail
Tell your heart to beat
Or suffer hearts deceit
Touch within your soul
You will be made whole
But you must
Don't lose trust
Just breathe in
Feel love within

Let your blood move, flow
Feel your heart again glow
Open up your teary eyes
Don't let love fantasize
Face these truths you need
Make your soul take heed
But do it now
You know how
Just let it flow
Feel love grow

Make your mind take flight
Bathe rejuvenating light
Reveal your spirit within
Awake and arise, enter in
Believe in loves' soft kiss
Don't loves' smile dismiss
But don't wait
Nor hesitate
Just take wing
Feel loves spring

Marsha

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

1 posted 2001-01-07 12:38 PM

Now this is a format that fits you well my friend. I loved the way you took the cadence to a new level in this one and you found a way to say twice as much in half the amount of words. Wonderful penning from you this afternoon.

Marsha

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

2 posted 2001-01-08 06:23 PM

Mark my friend, thank you so very very much, I was trying a variety of different styles and it was a very interesting exercise, although I'm not sure if this is what Kari was trying to get me to see. But if such a connoiseur as you found it enjoyable then I am pleased.
I do thank you a great deal
Take care
Mushy

Take back the hope you gave,- I claim
Only a memory of the same
Robert Browning

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