Open Poetry #11 |
Lay Open the Envelope |
Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Lay Open the Envelope one thing as one shan't e'er do to see only flesh as fair beauty open this the envelope of me experience more than you could see 'tis all I should ask of you sagaciously see my orb of gaiety and fathom some intimate mystery witness within the lee of me this envelope that is for thee and not for all the world to see in this envelope seek a multitude of things and shy erudite wisdom, burning bright that would for thee as ochroid word shall sing long and true into the depths of night see thee what this envelope would bring that this envelope would envelop thought of what confidence might be sought of what indeed this envelope brought once now that your attention is caught indeed, 'tis so, t'would it be your lot to envelop the envelope that carries me in these the words that you solitarily see 01.07.01 |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Should we lay open the envelope to experience a tidal wave of treasured personality ... or should we sprinkle a little of you out at a time to brighten each day forever? |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
"witness within the lee of me this envelope that is for thee and not for all the world to see" You envelope us all with thee in the words of your poetry,....a wonderful write,..a pleasure to read... Poeminister "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, this is so wonderful, I can feel the power flowing back to you. If you were icandescent before, what does that make, Ahhhh white heat of the phoenix. Transcending spiraling upward, I will always be there amazed and delighted eternally by the brightness of my sister Phoenix, Persephone! Wonderful dear heart truly awesome. I know less is more, but when does that ever slow me down. Utterly brilliant Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Kari, I loved the poem,...but what the heck is "ochroid" the nearest I could come in my vocabulary is "mob rule" and I know that can't be write,errr rite errr correct. *laughs* write on, in ochroid song. Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
of the heart my friend. . . the envelope of your heart. . . wonderful. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Opening the envelope that is you is to open a Pandora's box of wonderful proportions - something I would be reluctant to do except in a sealed room wherein I could contain the treasures thus released. - I loved the verse formation and rhyme scheme of this ocher colored piece too ~G~ (ochroid - sheesh ) |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Thanks Wil, I knew that!... sheesh Sis the least you could do if your gonna make up words is to put a definition at the top. Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Rex, my friend, 'tis your choice...but I would recommend a little at a time...{~,^}... Poeminister, thank you for the smiles, and the comment, so glad you enjoyed... Marsha, your words always "tickle me pink..."...lol...thank you!... Kethry...lol..."pale-yellow" or "golden"...now...does that help? P.S. I'll send bigger dictionary... Sven, thank you kindly...indeed, I hope so... don't know any other way... Why Mr. Yeats...I blush...thank you!...{~,^}... Kethry, no can do...love to make some work for a hobby...LOL...thank you again!... |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Love this in so many ways, Kari, it is phenomenal. Sandra |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
So many times we do not take the time to look inside the envelope to discover what's inside...and much is lost. Let's open them together and see what envelopes!! |
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