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The Visitor
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The Visitor |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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The Visitor in my woods there is a corner ~ a copse ~ where all is quiet no matter the time of day with the exception of an owl in flight in the lee of night or a hawk on high in the day of sky or the wind that sighs and it is here in these woods beneath the naked trees I sit quietly and wait for the eye that would behold me the bearer of the eye that should beware my smile shall wear a coat of tawny sheen his eye shall bear a golden gleam quiet, in muffled silence I draw to my lungs a shallow breath lest I sigh, too, too obtrusive and my proximity give away for I would view my visitor I would catch his eye ~ a puissant challenge, he suffers few in his presence such is his powerful essence a crackle of leaf draws courtesy of my gaze as a brown squirrel runs his maze across the branch of the elderberry making lively, making merry still I await the non-sound as the woods become subdued before magnificence comes on crafted limb and all other bestial beings grow silent in his propinquity as he enters the copse and takes up my soul in the depth of his golden eye I can only take up his imagery in the eye of my camera and he looks direct at me and the shutter shudders and only one of us is the better for the spell he shall leave behind 01.06.01 Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Wow.......loved looking through your camera......must have been magical!  -SEA |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A wonderful fantasy, beautifully written, cool and green and haunting. Corinne |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Love the flavor, love the feel of this one. It carries one through a garden of images and sensations. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
sunshine, you put me right there..... |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Sunshine, Nice picture in your woods. I was there, in anticipation! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
as he enters the copse and takes up my soul in the depth of his golden eye I can only take up his imagery in the eye of my camera and he looks direct at me and the shutter shudders and only one of us is the better for the spell he shall leave behind ============== You cast a spell with your words in this one. I read it twice to make sure I caught it all but I will be going back as I am still not convinced that I did.......but I will my friend. This was a magnificant piece you have penned and I know that I have said that before but I truely mean it. I was captivated from the title on down and still am. |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
I saw a buck, big and bold and beautiful, yours did indeed weave a spellbinding tale, enjoyed it much. With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
I love the rhythm and tone of this peice its filled with vibrant imagery all the way through that absorbs the reader into the moment beautifully.... thoroughly enjoyed. And it goes into my library. Excellent writing... Poeminister |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I especially liked that the species not revealed - choice of words too - as magical as the poet - (I need a bit more propinquity ~S~) |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
This was wonderful...makes me wonder just what you did see...can I see the picture? |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautiful..and once again improving my vocabulary *s ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari love, as perenial as the sun, this is absolutely beautiful love. True beauty and I can see you there too love, utterly wonderful love. Really first class work and yes I love it don't I always Take care Majestic Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA...so long since we've met...welcome home...and yes, dear...always a new perspective through the lens... Corinne...no fantasy...I have the copse, the camera, and the image... Virginia, I am so very glad you "felt" it...a wonderful compliment, thank you... 'Deer...that, Sir...was the intent, and I am glad you allowed yourself to be transported... Krawdad, isn't anticipation a wondrous feeling?...thank you... Mark, never for a moment do none of us believe that you don't mean what you say...if I wove a spell, that was my intent...for the copse is magical, as are the surroundings of these blue walls...thank you... dragonpoe...I am so very glad for what you saw, thank you... Poeminister...thank you for allowing yourself into this piece all of the way, and for the honor of gracing your library... Mr. Yeats...your kind words show me what I myself missed...for yes indeed I had a specific animal in mind...but that it was not named lent a little more mystery to the piece, as you have pointed out...thank you for your insightful readings... Paula, let me know the time you plan to arrive...I'll be here...we will visit the copse together... Thank you Wynter... Yes, Marsha, you always do...and I count on it...thank you!... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I couldn't help but think of my boss as I read this (after enduring the boss from hell, I finally have a great one. *S*) She goes to wildlife refuges on weekends trying to be still enough to persuade the residents she is harmless with her camera... only to be foiled many times by noisy people (who probably go home wondering why they never see any animals! LOL) |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Thank you for sharing, Suthern...when the right visitor comes and we have the perfect moment, sometimes the "click" is enough to scare them off... I can understand your employer's frustrations! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sounds like a wonderful escape there in your own private thicket so close to nature where you can observe that busy little creature on his own home grounds. Great write! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah Ethome, thank you....that peace and tranquility was shattered yesterday...you'll see it...in #12 |
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