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Someday you will paint my words........
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Someday you will paint my words........ |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Someday you will paint my words and like an artist's rendering a lovely line will lead then to a lovely scene a winsome lass on canvas of green in your artist's rendering a cubist, nay, you are not but rather you would featherly wrought a raging sea of blackish-blue under sky of grayish hue and keen-line in a ship so fine through port-hole a glass of Madeira wine can be seen if you peer from the pier there as you stand in the distance from shore with paintbrush in hand and if you were to paint my words and then attempt to affix me to canvas light in day's sun bright would you rather see me in moonshine after a glass or two or three of wine speaking these words so fine…….. ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ ~ do paint me with blessed eyes of green a large great smile and perhaps a patina of sheen, and if you could some engaging wise oh, I do so love you, you see when you attempt to look at me when my words rhyme with "thee" and when you smile in my eyes in the morning at three… but if you someday should attempt to paint my words is there a color that goes with unheard? [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 11-16-2000).] |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is a piece of art! Excellent! Very nice read sunshine.  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
*clapping* applause, well done Sunshine. Well done indeed. *brite smiles* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Humble in your presence am I, my friend. When I grow up, I want to write like you. jwesley |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Sunshine, Well written, and very enjoyable read. Such talent shown here. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--This is fantastic...I loved every line....Bravo!!! (I am also jumping up and down and clapping..I am!) |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I stand back in awe of this one...I've been trying my pen at this format and it simply stands back and laughs at me But under your talent the words are woven into beautiful poetry~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
that would be the color of life. . . superb. . . ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
How one could paint your words I swear I'll never know. I know they'd need, at least,the skill Of Michaelangelo. Where would they find the canvas? That problem would be rough For I can't think of any canvas Strong or large enough. Where would they find the colors? The standard ones won't do. A brand new rainbow pallet would Be needed just for you. So - paint your words? - Impossible! A task no one can do. Your pen must be the paintbrush And be held by only you. This is an extremely beautiful poem, Sunshine. The thought, concept and planning very well done... |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
 standing ovation :[This message has been edited by Snow (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
I'll just join in the hearty applause; for another well-done piece of artistry from you Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Wow... thank you insect; Gentle Spirit, {~,^} thank you... james, right back at you Sir... thank you Daniel... Martie, someday, let me know when I really get it right, OK?...I'm relying on YOU... BDC, come forward, I will never laugh at you, only with you... Sven, true... Balladeer, wow...thank you...I am now thoroughly humbled... Snow thanks...Peppermint, thank you so much for reading... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sunshine~ I loved the way this made me feel....I liked the part about the ocean best, but the poem felt so warm...I enjoyed this very much this morning -SEA |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is superb, utterly amazing, oh how you paint with words, truly a masterpiece. Your work is getting better and better, utterly wonderful work. Take care Majestic Marsha  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Karilea this is just awesome!! <*\\\>< I know not what the future holds, but I know Who holds the future. I don't question YOUR existance - GOD |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, I will attempt to try to pen more that will please you...thank you for reading... Marsha...my own applause section...aren't you just the best? thank you... Whtdove, thanks for flying in to take a peek... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Karilea~  'and if you were to paint my words and then attempt to affix me to canvas light do paint me with blessed eyes of green' And a crown of gold for sure. Lovely, poet lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
aw...shucks, Marge...[scuffing toe...] now I'm blushing...  Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
karilea-- no one would "paint" your words because there are no colors to compare to the beauty of this. excellent write!! your talent is stunning and amazing. take care. ~amy~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Amy, thank you, but I am not stunning nor amazing, I am just grateful to be able to share with a spirit such as you, I do so enjoy your work...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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