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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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Can you stay? once more come ‘round come hie come lie once more if you could but stay I will give only silence just to hear your sigh soft breath memories of soft talk if you would but stay close here take me back to the time when nothing mattered you were mine I was yours now it’s gone past the tears of today can you stay? I thought not You’re on your way towards a yesterday and there’ll be no me in your poetry Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Ohhhh, I'm relating to this one.......I really like this....excellent!  -SEA |
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dragonpoe Senior Member
since 2000-11-12
Posts 608Palm Bay, Florida |
"And there'll be no me in your poetry" Oh, I love that line!!!! With the word, I am mighty, with the pen I am free.. dragonpoe |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Sunshine, this speaks, clearly. Love it all, but this part ahhhh,...is just so right on,... "if you could but stay I will give only silence just to hear your sigh". Awesome lady. *Peace. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
SEA, we are most likely kindred spirits...and you may be Anne, and I shall be your best friend... dp, it pleases me when specific lines are pulled out as "the one..." thank you... Spitfire, I treasure "awesome"...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
take me back to the time when nothing mattered you were mine I was yours now it’s gone past the tears of today can you stay? ========= Past the tears of today and on his way back to yesterday.........I must say that you have such a wonderous way of penning intensity in a poem. Loved it much even between the lines of burden. |
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madlion Junior Member
since 2000-11-20
Posts 12boca raton |
wow , what a great poem.....i could relate to every word of it.....thank you |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
When you're really good - you more than that by far - this has so many phrases of such great intensity and imagery - I won't try to quote them all here - suffice to say this is magnificent! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, you're right there is much beauty in these pages, and so much of it from you love. Love this one, I do really. It is such a wonderful flow, you surely can write. Wonderful as always. Take care MM Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Sunshine, no man alive would not trade a year of yesterdays for one tomorrow with you  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
From your heart my friend. . . As always. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
a little late in getting back to thank everyone for their kind remarks... Mark, I am glad you had time to read, thank you... madlion, many of us find ways to relate...thank you for reading... Mr. Yeats, a magnificent from you is praise indeed, thank you... Thank you Marsha...as always... 'Deer...now are you really sure about that?...LOL...thank you fellow Moderator!... Thank you Sven... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, it matters not that you were late getting back it gave me another chance to read this. It really is a wonderful piece from you, as always. I truly do love this one. Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
yes..... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
take me back to the time when nothing mattered you were mine I was yours now it’s gone past the tears of today ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ SUNSHINE, my dear, the above quote from your poem just echoes thru my soul... And as you already know from the praise you receive on your writing you truly weave a poem with IMMENSE intensity that goes beyond just eloquent words it's as though a soul speaks in hush of whisper thru a page or screen it's indcredible but sometimes I can sense a breath or soft sigh under each word you pen... I dunno maybe it's the caffine and lack of sleep nah it's you sweetie your way with poetry is soooooooooooooo sweet I adore it... coco |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
yes, oh yes says he your heard wrong for I shall stay and then I will sigh Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marsha, any instance where I can pull you in twice is a doubly-lucky day for me...thank you!... 'Deer...really?...aw...thank you... CoCo...all I have wanted with my poetry is to touch a heart...so that someone would feel the words, as you have expressed...that you took the time to write this note...impresses me...thank you very much for sharing your thoughts...I hope you continue to enjoy... Interloper, you are making me blush...thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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