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See me, Feel me, touch me, Heal me.
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See me, Feel me, touch me, Heal me. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Based on the song from Tommy.See me please, before I disappear It can bring heart's ease when you're drawing near I work so hard to go away every single day But when you simply see me, I know I have to stay See the real me is my desperate plea Feel me in my lines of poetry so clear I need to know you're moved, it can keep me here I struggle with my feelings it's not a game I play But when you can feel me, it helps keep pain at bay Feel me is my plea, and see the real me Touch me for I'm so alone, with no one that's dear And isolation burns, with every lonely tear Immolate, incarcerate, a prison on my way I need someone to touch me, or love me anyway Touching I can feel, can make me seem so real Heal me, my self-medicate, cannot hide the sear Of my pain filled spirit that lets me disappear Healing touch your gift to me, to help me through this day Healing love is what I crave, to show the path, the way I need a touch of heal, encourage me to feel See me, feel me, show me grace That I might walk an easier pace Touch me, heal, me in life's race Let me know beauty of love's face That I may be made real, integrated in appeal Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Feel me in my lines of poetry so clear I need to know you're moved, it can keep me here I struggle with my feelings it's not a game I play But when you can feel me, it helps keep pain at bay Feel me is my plea, and see the real me =============== Heal me, my self-medicate, cannot hide the sear Of my pain filled spirit that lets me disappear Healing touch your gift to me, to help me through this day Healing love is what I crave, to show the path, the way I need a touch of heal, encourage me to feel ================= Keth this is so way cool... I love this. very creative take on an old inspiration what a cool idea ... love that last line. later-rock-on-gator jm Am I loved by my words Will my vows weather the tide Bended knees can forsee all the rhythms of life And a heart can be held without pride ~Vante |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Kethry, Very creative, well done. Tommy holds a special place in my heart. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I would do all those things, Keth...you are worth them all  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 Kethry...write on!... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
JanetMarie, thanks for the playback of my words. Iloveitwhenyoudothisforme. Daniel JD, yeah Tommy had style didn't he. Sunshine thank you for the light and quote. 'Deer All the things you said you do can I add a one or two would you flirt outrageously show your charm for the world to see would you give praise where none is due would you drink champagne from my shoe (phew) Would you lay your coat for me would you, could you, set me free (Dr Seuss lives )Thanks everyone Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kethry love, this is astoundingly perceptive and utterly utterly wonderfully deep. This really moves me, and no love I do not mean from my desk to the canteen! This is really so well written love absolutely truly fabulous. Did I not say I don't ever lie, and I don't love not ever. (I might bend the truth sometimes but not about poetry love never!) Absolutely ace, didn't I say, a little re inflation and I start to rise. We could start our own Phoenix group, (A bit like the Bloomsbury Group, but not so bad tempered!) I can just see everyone looking them up, I could save them all the effort, but I don't want to spoil their enjoyment. Take care kid Slushy  Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Slushy, I feel you make me real! (Rats! I wanted to be part of the Bloomsbury group) Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Poignant and powerful... Well done, Kethry! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
My fellow Phoenix, you wouldn't have like the Bloomsbury Group, Have you ever been to Bloomsbury, well if you haven't don't bother, I don't know what it was like in the early 1900, but now it's ghastly. (There for those who aren't as quick as others that's a clue!) Now why would I spoil their fun by making it too easy. Take care kid, stretch those wings of fire and we shall spiral up trust me (I know lots of doctors, not necessarily in the biblical sense love) Slushy And this deserves to go back to the top be good Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yes, we do, we read your words and we hear and care about you! "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 Based on a song from the The Who????Hey, I think they are a Dr. Seuss Character or something... Anyway, just to let you know that You and Your poems are loved, so dont't be goin' no where... Love Ya, Bob <>< |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
suthern, thank you, it's friendship like yours that keeps me here. Marsha, I haven't even been in England since the mid nineteen fifties let alone the other. Thanks doubly for responding. Irish Rose, thank you that you have heard and felt for me. Lighthousebob. I think that's correct Who's on first? be well Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Keth - I like this poem - especially the part about feeling you. Where shall I start? *veg* Great idea, BTW. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
LJA, well YOU could start with my feet. *s* be well. Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Ah this is so much you Keth it's just wonderful!! |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
To be REALLY seen and REALLY felt is what we all want... You have that Keth, in your true friends, others may inspire you, but remember you inspire others as well. Love you for your love and optimism.. Huge Hugs, Isis *The heart of education is the education of the heart...* ~Isis~~Sovereign of the Spirit. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderfully put my friend, and well written too. I think passions is definitely the place to get it done. jwesley |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, Isis and jwesley, thanks for the responses, they are much appreciated. Keth Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Terrific rhyme cadence and a very heart-touching poem. Peace! Nathan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Kethry, I read your poem two times and the second time I chose to read it slowly and with pause and I gotta tell you the expression here is soooo touching... It's not every day a poem read can innocently set the mind to drift to a time of past yet your poem has... I admire the way you pen of heart and soul it just takes hold of a reader and this one shall go in2 my library... A very captivating write sweetie thank you [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 01-06-2001).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nate, thanks for the critique of my work. I'm glad you liked it, sometimes I get lost in the flow of the words and forget about the time and cadence. Thanks for reminding me that they too are important. Coco, that you included this in your library is an honour indeed. Be well, you're swell Kethry Those of us who refuse to risk and grow get swallowed up by life. Patty Hansen. |
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