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Agust P
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since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

0 posted 2001-01-02 01:29 PM

It is strange, but I used to write poems... a lot of them. Then I somehow fell asleep, and for more than twenty years I did not write one poem. Then it came back and I write them in English even if I have never lived in an English speaking country... sorry if it's a little childish language.

ANGEL

you came like an angel
from a secret world
and you touched me far away

and like a hot wind
you whispered soft words
into my sleeping soul
and forgotten wings
began to grow again

now I can fly
like an eagle over my blue mountains
thank you

I miss you
and yet I have not met you
my angel from a secret world

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2001-01-02 01:34 PM

I am certainly glad you awoke and found yourself here in Passions! Welcome, and we all hope you pleasure us with more gems such as this! Check your e-mail for a special message!

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2001-01-02 01:42 PM

This is just incredible. I love it, and I think it's beautiful...I hope you have an archive of more...am looking forward to many, many more. Welcome!

Agust P
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

3 posted 2001-01-02 01:51 PM

Thanks you so much, Sunshine and serenity, you know, its not easy to take this step, but I had to and you help me!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

4 posted 2001-01-02 01:57 PM

and like a hot wind
you whispered soft words
into my sleeping soul
and forgotten wings
began to grow again

very pretty..Welcome...

~Wynter

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

Agust P
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

5 posted 2001-01-02 03:13 PM

Thanks nakdthoughts, I like your poems very much and its important for me that you like my little poem

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

6 posted 2001-01-02 04:36 PM

This is so lovely I would never have dreamed that English isn't your native tongue. *S* Welcome... I look forward to reading more!

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

7 posted 2001-01-02 07:07 PM

This is the language of the soul...poetry.

ANGEL

"you came like an angel
from a secret world
and you touched me far away"

you've blended beautifully two complete opposite thoughts into an amazing comparison. This is brilliant in my opinion.

"and like a hot wind
you whispered soft words
into my sleeping soul
and forgotten wings
began to grow again"

II've never heard wings be described as "forgotten" and yet you did.  This is original language, refreshing to read, a joy.

"now I can fly
like an eagle over my blue mountains
thank you

I miss you
and yet I have not met you
my angel from a secret world"

Instead of describing the eagle flying through a blue sky, you say the mountains are blue, how utterly stunning.

and you end it leaving us to a secret world, what in the world could be more beautiful.  You were sleeping during those years, you were nurturing your soul for this..here and now.

Welcome to Passions.

< !signature-->

"Every man dies.
Not every man truly lives."
Braveheart

   Kathleen

[This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 01-02-2001).]

inot2B
Member Elite

since 2000-09-18

Posts 2205
Arkansas

8 posted 2001-01-02 07:49 PM

Welcome! This is great and I don't find it childish at all. Your poem has a deeper meaning than just words. Believe and you can fly anywhere you wish.

Dawn Eclipse
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since 2000-01-31

Posts 637
The Horsehead Nebula

9 posted 2001-01-02 08:05 PM

Wonderful poem, and it has a great meaning. Keep writing! I enjoyed it very much.

"Forget regret, or life is yours to miss. No other course, no other way... No day but today"
~Broadway Musical RENT~

*Cassandra Roseen*

Charisma

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since 2000-09-30

Posts 5906
lost in blue pages

10 posted 2001-01-02 08:17 PM

welcome to passions......love your entrance...wonderful penned....and don't worry about the language, English isn't my native tongued either....and well to tell you a secret....I never wrote poems before...started last year to write and I'm still learning...from all the great poets here....its a wonderful place here at passions.

will look forward for more
((hugs))

Charisma

Agust P
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

11 posted 2001-01-03 07:50 AM

I'm overwhelmed! Thank you so much for liking my poem, I love all those beautiful words you all are giving me. Thank you suthern, thank you Irish Rose for your wonderful words, thank you inot2B, thank you Dawn Eclipse for your support, thank you Charisma for encouraging me... well, just thanks to all of you poets!

Ladycat

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since 1999-07-05

Posts 782
At the edge and a doorway,TX

12 posted 2001-01-03 09:22 AM

You know there was this wonderful man that I met over the internet that called me angelo mio. Angel mine.  That was the most beautiful thing that I had heard in a long time.  A guy from far away.
This piece reminded me of that.
WOW!!  This is one of those pieces that I have to add to my library.  This moved right into my heart and soul.
It brought back good memories of days with long talks to a person that I had never meet, but I had touched.  Thank you so much.

This is the first time in a long time that you have written anything.  Impressive.... That is the only thing that I can think to say.

Welcome to Passions.
Take your shoes off stay awhile.  I sure know that I would love to read more by you.

Love,
Lady

Live in my world just once and you'll find yourself enraptured.

1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

13 posted 2001-01-03 12:56 PM

I loved this poem...........lots of us have been touched in one way or another by someone we have never met.......the net makes the world a closer place....Welcome to passions & i look foward to more of your poems

aurora rain
Member

since 2000-11-15

Posts 90

14 posted 2001-01-03 01:59 PM

i'm going to send that to someone i care about very much.....because you touched my heart with it. you accurately described a situation, and nothing, nothing at all, makes poetry more heartfelt, more amazing, more real, than when it hits upon you so closely.

welcome! (even though i'm not a rabid poster....i've been here since november and i lurk all the time)

Gemini
Senior Member

since 1999-12-15

Posts 1203
Wisconsin, USA

15 posted 2001-01-03 02:08 PM

AgustP-Welcome! Your poem was beautiful, tender and full of faith.

seraphin
Senior Member

since 2000-09-24

Posts 1004
Michigan

16 posted 2001-01-03 02:10 PM

Beautiful! Innocent, vibrant, alluring. I love it!

EagleOne
Member Elite

since 2000-03-07

Posts 2829
Between a laugh and a tear...

17 posted 2001-01-03 02:41 PM

Welcome! I thoroughly enjoyed this one, look forward to more from your pen! Take care!

"The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest"
~ My Angel.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

18 posted 2001-01-03 02:46 PM

*sigh* how delightful that you are writing again. If this is a sample I look forward to much more. This poem is wonderful and leaves a soft caress in the soul. Much love and hugs from me to you.

Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams.
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Agust P
Member

since 2000-12-29

Posts 157

19 posted 2001-01-03 03:06 PM

What can I say... I’m home, and what for warm greetings! Thank you so much Ladycat for your beautiful words, I like your poems a lot and I will keep on enjoying them. And thanks to you 1slick_lady, you know I also love your poems! And aurora rain, thanks for your gifts, I hope I deserve them and thanks to you Gemini and seraphin and EagleOne and Startime, I love you all and now I’m afraid I cant stand under your expectations... but anyhow, home at last, that’s what counts!

Mark Bohannan
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-21

Posts 7269
In the winds of Cherokee song

20 posted 2001-01-03 03:23 PM

Wonderful first posting. Now no more sleeping on us okay? I look forward to reading more of your works especially if they are all the caliber of this one. WELCOME TO PASSIONS btw.

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