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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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Lighthouse As the wind swept clouds across a thoughtless mind and as wave after wave crashed upon feelings... the lighthouse stood watch a beacon for those lost at sea. And when the eyes cleared to reveal a starlit night for guidance to navigate around an impending mood... the lighthouse still stands watch a beacon for ships lost in me. Robert |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So few words... so much inspiration... so little time... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great, Robert!! Very good!! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And when the eyes cleared to reveal a starlit night for guidance to navigate around an impending mood... the lighthouse still stands watch a beacon for ships lost in me. ========= very cool use of metaphor very cool poem the impact of the last line is perfect excellent writing poet sir jm  Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Dark Enchantress Senior Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 1258meet Morgana |
I'll have to agree with the others...your use of words is just wonderful in this. Where would we be without those beacons of light? Angel I am no one if not myself. ~*SeLf PrOcLaImEd FrEaK oF nAtUrE*~ |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Sunshine...I truly believe that I am incapable of writing a long poem. So I work with what I have and try to make each word (feeling) count. Denise, I thank you. This is one of my more liked poems. I usually don't care a lot for my poems. Too critical. JM...I LOVE metaphors. Why say "she broke my heart" when I can say "dangerous skies and angry clouds"? PS: I Love the lighthouse!! Angel I agree. We all need a beacon to guide us. Or at least give us hope that there is land ahead. Robert |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Metaphor is the soul of poetry and Aristotle said it is the sign of genius. Now, doesn't that make your day? I loved this. I have written several poems about Lighthouses. I saw my first one last spring. They hold special meaning, however, I was not prepared for the ending lines and how wonderful they are!< !signature--> "Every man dies. Not every man truly lives." Braveheart Kathleen [This message has been edited by Irish Rose (edited 12-30-2000).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Yes, when waves are calm, when waves are high, either hour, lighthouse stands by. You say much in little time. Not a strong point of mine. Well done! I applaud you! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A man of quality and a genius to boot....I knew that!  Denise |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thank you Kathleen.....YES My day is made now with that comment!! VAS, a lighthouse is always there whether or not one actually needs it. Denise.....you are something you!! Robert |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Robert, So incredibly beautiful! I can almost see the lighthouse, and feel the beacon guiding me. An eloquent and surreal work of art. Elise |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
thank you so much athena....it is a neat thing when a visual accompanies the words. Robert |
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