Open Poetry #11 |
two improvisational pieces |
Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
Improvisational poem: Subject: hot chocolate at night Word: roads ------------------- Begin Poem Here: ebony skies, starry wishes, and dreams traveling along the roads in my memory how far I've traveled from where I've been from hammers and stains of crimson/black red how much I've learned while watching the fires of hell beat against my soul the lessons i was made to learn the demons have risen and taken my sleep again and the insomniac welcomes the madness.. to be found again in another brandy laced hot chocolate night ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Improvisational poem: Subject: tree leaves and windy days/nights Word: gone ------------------- Begin Poem Here: Tag a nature ballet of orange and red floating upon the wind.... and i remember the days when they were piled up high ... and how we would roll in the dense carpet of color while pretending to play football, by tag, yet you come at me with smirk and together we'd begin to fall fall, like the leaves as they danced in the wind until they crumpled and died in the sun, and much like your love ...the colors have gone with the wind "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
snow, good improvisation. I especially like the leaves one, such vivid images. write on Kethry Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
thank you, Kethry |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
improvisational? does that mean you wrote without doing any edits at all? who picked the subjects and the key words? just curious... i mean, did you choose them yourself or were they suggested to you? sometimes that's really inspirational to have another person/writer suggest words/thoughts then write on it.... sort of like the "challenges" we have here at passions... some very good poetry comes out of stream-of-consciousness -- without any edits... you did an excellent job with both of these... enjoyed them very much! good work! [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 12-29-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very well done in both cases and I guess I'd have to ask the same questions as Doreen but I'd also have to compliment you the same way. I enjoyed the idea of them being improvisational...wonderful idea! |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
Writer's Block Thank you for the replies.. to answer your questions... There is no editing involved. The subjects and keywords are from a data base that I developed for my site, consisting of 300+ subjects and 500+ keywords that were submitted by my members. The link above is to the Writer's Block forum, inside the Library at, Lady Snow's Ice Castle. Inside the Writer's Block, is a link to the improv generator that anyone is free to use. I hope this answers your questions.. thank you for reading and replying. Snow [This message has been edited by Snow (edited 12-29-2000).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
I think I'd like to try that. May I? write on Kethry Religion is for people frightened about going to hell - Spirituality is for people who have been there. Anon. |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
Kethry, please do! the improv generator is open to the public to use ... enjoy it! Snow "...I am a river in winter, quiet in the eyes of most but deep, swift and full of life to one, lucky enough to fall through the ice. |
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