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A Broken Wing
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A Broken Wing |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
A Broken Wing A broken feather on a wing Is only noticed when in flight When the wing is in full view And all the feathers are in sight But each time a feather breaks It becomes apparent in one’s eyes The wounds are easier to see Much harder to disguise Relentless becomes the flight An easy journey gets too long A wing with so few feathers Still keeps flying although not strong All it takes is one swift wind For that wing to break Struggling not to fall When everything’s at stake With a broken wing I’ll carry on My wounds much easier to see You’ve left me with only one My one strong wing will carry me |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
This does seem to be an analogy of a human trial compared to a bird with a broken wing. I enjoyed the read. Did I get the message right? |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
VAS: Yes you did. That's exactly what it is. It's about how wounds happen and how at the beginning they don't affect us as much and therefore when others around us look at us they can't see that there's anything wrong except for when we open up to them. As more wounds happen the easier it is for others around us to see through us and see how hurt we really are. So we struggle on even though we may be damaged. We pick up the peices and keep moving forward no matter what. Thanks for responding!  kat [This message has been edited by kat (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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FlyHigh Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 84Bekkestua, Norway |
Lovely poem. Took me away... =) gJ -- "Luck affects everything. Let your hook always be cast; in the stream where you least expect it there will be a fish." Ovid (BC 43-18 AD) |
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Lloyd Junior Member
since 1999-06-16
Posts 17Torquay, Vic. Australia |
I have to say that I have a real liking for this type of poem but even so I thought this one was a little special. Something just about anyone could relate to. Well done Kat !!! |
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Dakota Member
since 2000-05-25
Posts 125New York |
Here's a bandage for that broken wing In the hopes that one day again you'll sing Trials and tribulations we all go through So remember little bird we're here with you So mend that wing and all thats inside Wear those wings with honor and pride Lead on with Life and always try And soon again you'll be flying high Very nicely done as always Kat!! You have a keen perspective on life and portray it so well in your poems...  [This message has been edited by Dakota (edited 11-17-2000).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Kat, you know how people say, "I know exactly how you feel" and yet inside you say to yourself, they couldn't possibly? Well this time I can say, I am with you and it's not easy flying with one wing. huggzz ~Wynter I added this to my library...for inspiration "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
FlyHigh: I'm glad you enjoyed it so much! Thanks! Lloyd: Welcome to Passions! I'm glad you like it! Yes, I'm sure alot can relate to this. Thanks! Dakota: I'll be flying high with pride But one thing I cannot hide A mended wing still hurts A pain each storm inserts Thank-you for your beautiful poem! Umm..the bandage please? LOL I'm glad you enjoyed it! Wynter: You're right! It's not easy at all to fly with one good wing. It's a shame you know the feeling. Thanks for responding and I'm glad you enjoyed it! kat |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
What a beautiful poem! You write such beautiful poems. Love this kat. |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Kat, this is absolutely beautiful!!! Such great work... I really enjoyed this piece of work. Thanks, Kat! Sauni Sauni :) Have you ever known the color grey when the nighttime finds you weak I have, I've walked that road each time; that's where my angel sleeps |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
insect: Thanks so much! I'm glad you find my poems beautiful and that you loved this one. Saunni: I should be the one thanking you for your beautiful reply. Thanks so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it! kat |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All it takes is one swift wind For that wing to break Struggling not to fall When everything’s at stake With a broken wing I’ll carry on My wounds much easier to see You’ve left me with only one My one strong wing will carry me ============= Kat this is so very well written excellent use of metaphor and comparison ... and your rhyme and cadence flow perfectly this is a lovely emotive, expressive, bittersweet piece. the last line's impact holds true very well done take care jm Sprayed across my heart and hers Danced butterflies in the wild This angel, this woman , who loves me with the innocence of a child. ~DeVante~ |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
you expressed your feelings very well, love it and enjoyed it very much. Charisma |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful kat! Just sings with strength. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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