Open Poetry #11 |
Jamie's poem |
spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
The beauty of your soft blue eyes The touch of your blonde hair Reminds me of the lightest skies The smell of heavens air. Softness in your timid voice That warming sense I feel As if I really had a choice My heart you had to steal You had me from the very start No other had control That you and I are one in part More than I’ve yet to know For my blood flows through your sweet veins The essence of my life And in my heart a key contained A fathers love that’s right For an eternity [This message has been edited by spiked (edited 11-20-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Nothing sweeter than the love of a father that is willing to show it so openly. Excellent write from you and I just know that she is going to love it as well as you for it. Nice to see a poem such as this in here. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Rich, I'm glad you posted this one...it's a bit different now, yes? I love this one...shows the beauty of your spirit! Hugs. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you Mark. Serenity It's different the one I had shown You much more how I feel. First time I've ever written a poem for my daughter. Hope she likes it. Thanks, Rich |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
How could she not like it, Rich? It's beautiful. "The beauty of your soft blue eyes The touch of your blonde hair Reminds me of the lightest skies The smell of heavens air." The smell of heaven's air...what a totally original and lovely line! This poem is to be treasured, Rich. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
spiked- this is so lovely.. your daughter is very fortunate to have a daddy who loves her so much. beautiful write. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Rich...this is so sweet...a lovely way to tell her you love her...one she will cherish all the rest of her life...beautiful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
For my blood flows through your sweet veins The essence of my life And in my heart a key contained A fathers love that’s right For an eternity ============ Rich this is a beautiful tribute and testiment of a fathers love and that special bond between father and daughter. a very sweet read for sure. take care jm There are moments ... when I Love you beyond the limits of my human heart ... ...you will always be mine. Collin Raye |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank you very much Rainyday, Vicky, Paula and Janet Very nice to be seen like it was meant to be |
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Lloyd Junior Member
since 1999-06-16
Posts 17Torquay, Vic. Australia |
There is so much to like about what you have penned, Rich. Thanks for sharing it with us. Its a bit special !!! |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
Thank You Lloyd Rich |
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