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Do you wonder? |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan 
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I'm looking for you. I know that you're out there, somewhere. I've been looking for you since I was a child Digging through the lost existance of my memories, clawing at the way that they laugh at me, not wanting to hear that sound again. And you, all you can do is just shake your head. Do you know what kind of pain I'm going through? Do you feel the longing and the passion that I feel for you? Do you? All you can do is tell me that you're "not ready". What aren't you ready for? I've never asked any more of you than you could handle. And all you can do is hide behind that wall again. The wall where I found you, the wall that I brought you out from behind of to let you see the sun. I'm not going to wait for you. But if you need me, I'll be here. Why? Because I care. Although I shouldn't But sometimes, it's all that I can do. < !signature--> passion is life. . . ~Diana [This message has been edited by Passions Voice (edited 11-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Diana, with a heart rendering showing such as this I am sure that you will find your life as you want it. Your words and your heart shine in this one and from this cowboy, I wish for you the happiness you seek. Don't give up my friend, there are many rainbows hidden in the clouds just waiting to show their faces. |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
Moving on and letting go......an excellent portrayal of your emotions. Really nice job with this, Passion's Voice! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Mark, thank you so much my friend. I have missed you and am glad that you are back. I know that you understand. Dreamkeeper, yes, we do need to let go and move on. But I'm just going to keep that lifeline there just in case. Thank you. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Hey Diana sounds like a rough times poem... very well expressed hurt...I really appreciate the depth of the line "I've never asked any more of you than you can handle." I don't know how you could play more fair than that. I read these pleas and expressions all the time at Passions and realize that on both sides of the story (male and female) there tends to be so many onesided love affairs and though it's sad I have to say writing about it really helps...if you want my opinion and you probably don't I would say that it's time for you to think about moving on instead of hanging on...because the impression I get of you is much nicer than the one I'm getting of the one you are waiting for...take care.. ethome |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Diana, this is very well written and your response is pefect "keeping the lifelines open just in case"...that is true wisdom. You are no passing shadow....  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
This is excellent PV. . . I can feel the confusion and the hurt feelings. . . it's hard to let go but yet care isn't it?? We've all been there. . . great poem. . .  ---------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
PV, If you stick around awhile and show you care, you may be surprised at what could happen. Never say never. LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
ethome, thank you; you're probably right. Balladeer, it's all that I know how to do. To let go, but not to let go; that is the question. Sven, thank you. It's nice to know that others relate. Lone Wolf, you can only stick around so long. Thank you. < !signature--> passion is life. . . ~Diana [This message has been edited by Passions Voice (edited 11-21-2000).] |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I came back to read this one and to add it to my library. Still loving this one much my friend. Your words in this one hold much to be comtemplated about and just thought that you should know. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
oooppppppsssss double posting....oh well, now you know that I was really taken by it if my hands were that unsteady now don't you?  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 11-22-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful poem PV ... many emotions expressed in this ... sometimes we do invest to much time in waiting on someone who has built walls up around their heart. take care jm |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
A heart touching weave...tender and gentle with threads of pain and longing...to want to be the one for another...to know that if they would just allow you to enter their heart it would be right...but sometimes those scars and walls are so thick that the sunshine just can't be seen...excellent writing~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
NICELY WRITTEN!!!!!!!!! |
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Tony Abbot Member
since 2000-11-18
Posts 209North Wales,UK |
I concur,very passionate writing.Top notch. 'Humankind cannot bear too much reality' T.S.Eliot |
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Passions Voice Member
since 2000-10-23
Posts 291Michigan |
Mark, thank you again. Twice!! Janet Marie, sometimes we do. But it's hard to let go when you care about them so much. You just want the best for them. Thank you for reading. Butterflies, thank you. I do want to enter again. Not as much as before, but I do want to show that I still care. vandana, thank you!!! Tony, thank you for saying that my writing is passionate. It's very nice of you. passion is life. . . ~Diana |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And now it is my turn to be missing you my friend. I hope that all is going well with you and that the busy in your life settles down a bit. We need you here. At least I know I do and your verse says that you would be here if needed so WHERE ARE YOU??  Just thought that this one needed to be riding the blue pages once again so here we go. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
Diana, my condolences. This is a heartfelt poem with a real feeling behind it. |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Such heartfelt writing...I can relate to this so much...let go, hang on, let go..Hard to figure just what to do...Letting go hurts much less..eventually... ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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