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Poeminister Senior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 1862Regina SK; Canada |
Prayer... You ancient stars of great golden light up high in zenithal glory bright, adorning eternity's hue of night, I implore thy heed. conceive my might. Many say you will sometimes offer blessings great for prayers delivered and that faith makes fate, that you higher powers will generously donate these blessings if we truley beleive and wait All my life I've thought "gods" were humankind and that you "powers" were but inside our mind so foolish I thought we our own blessings designed if we worked together being mutual and kind But Cheif-governing Sols-you mighty bodies thoughts must be the faults in our qualities for I look on the governments of ants and bees and wish humans could find such natural peace The hand of thought threatens nature's spot it feels like I'm watching the whole world rot when I watch news about people getting shot and wish I could just turn off all of it The air on this world has human breath so rank it might lead to nature's death technology so exceeds superficiality in breadth it smothers and disturbs her soul underneath She's only a child, still very young but black tar's accumulating in her lung a billion songs still wait to be sung and the only hope is in our changing I pray that all humankind will revive modesty that has seemed out of fashion for quite a century that people will find contentment and be happy and that things will slow down and find simplicity A wish for myself acompanying all of this just for some love - for someone to kiss on my last modicum of sanity, I'm needing bliss, and shall not want life without your forgiveness. "...no single sound too rude upon thy slumber shall intrude, Our thoughts, our souls- O God above! In every deed shall mingle, love." -Poe |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
a nice prayer... that people will find contentment and be happy and that things will slow down and find simplicity...strong wishes ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
This is one of the most open minded intelligent poems I've read for quite a while. This is reality and the nice thing is it's not a God blamer...which I always thought was a cop out..it's a realistic assessment of the world situation today..and it's true....we were created as a free moral agent with the ability to think and make decisions on our own (which is the way we all want to be actually) and we've made these decisions and created these modern day tools of technology (which in many cases are extremely beneficial) and now we have to deal with the problems created by this growth... I love this poem poeminister and I really do hope you find someone to love you it's the icing on the cake of life...take care... ethome |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
You ancient stars of great golden light up high in zenithal glory bright, adorning eternity's hue of night, I implore thy heed. conceive my might. Many say you will sometimes offer blessings great for prayers delivered and that faith makes fate, that you higher powers will generously donate these blessings if we truley beleive and wait All my life I've thought "gods" were humankind and that you "powers" were but inside our mind so foolish I thought we our own blessings designed if we worked together being mutual and kind ==================== A wish for myself acompanying all of this just for some love - for someone to kiss on my last modicum of sanity, I'm needing bliss, and shall not want life without your forgiveness. ================= this is exceptional writing .... your messages in this are of wisdom and truth... and you have written them into a very well done and honest,sincere piece of work... and your well done and clever rhyme scheme is the icing on the cake... perfect flow and cadence excellent work take care jm There are moments ... when I Love you beyond the limits of my human heart ... ...you will always be mine. Collin Raye |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Love the rhyme scheme, and not an easy one to achieve! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 What a realization from the spiritualistic humankind to the humanistic forgiven kind you have displayed in your fine writing... and I want you to know that I am bowing myself right next to you for such a grace as this.Bob <>< |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Poetminister, this is really very intellegent and well written poem. What we wouldn't give to live in a simpler time. I often think that if I could have some time to do this or that, but if i really needed it, I'm sure I'd find it. We all make excuses, but in reality which of us would jump off the merry go round if we could. Not as many as say they would I think. Although right at this moment I would not only jump off, I'd fly off. Really great work from you. Take care Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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