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The Pain of Eyes
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The Pain of Eyes |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL 
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The Pain of Eyes Most it seems are content to engage in small talk a verbal banter like fighters in a contest dancing around the ring for a prize that for the most part is measured in bruises. Though, if one explores the depth of conversation beyond the fringe areas and past the fences we build around our existence, there lie treasures that defy the imagination. On one such journey I happened to discover in the tone of your voice the pain of your eyes and felt your hurt in my heart. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well written/said, my friend, and so true for so many. My applause to you. jwesley |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wow - very well said! This really made me pause and think how sadly true your words are. This is a simple but brilliant sociological poem and I'm printing out a copy for myself to keep!  ~Melissa~ The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RobertB~ 'if one explores the depth of conversation' 'there lie treasures that defy the imagination.' This is a wonderful write - and if you could see my eyes - you would know - it touched my heart. It's so good to see you here ! You do stay gone too long ! Welcome home ! Happy Holidays, RobertB~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
On one such journey I happened to discover in the tone of your voice the pain of your eyes and felt your hurt in my heart. Enjoying reading Robert..Happy holidays to you.. ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thanks very much jwesley. Melissa, your comments made me stop and think on my poem. That is the hardest for me...to stop and reflect on my own words at times! Marge, this IS home. I do not understand why I keep trodding off to foreign lands to fight poetry battles with those who have no desire to change. Victoria, I appreciate the excerpt that moved you. I appreciate all of you. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
I don't think I've had the chance to read any of your work yet, but I surely will after this one..This was written with such truth for so many... ~LL~< !signature-->The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown [This message has been edited by Lady Lightning (edited 12-17-2000).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
loooook deep into my eyyyyes..... are you getting sleepy yet? NO? oh phooey! so much for that! i was trying to hypnotize you to learn the secrets behind the poetry.... oh well! your poem has a hypnotizing effect on the reader (did i spell that right? hmmmm) ... any way, missed reading you, glad your back, stay a while and forget the poetry battles, that's not good for a writer as talented as you  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
very insightful with sincere depth...good writing!! I loved the end I know it's happened to me and I can feel it for someone. Write on! ethome |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
It takes a person who truly cares to see the hurt inside. Great writing! Really enjoyed this!  sp I won't go; I won't sleep; I can't breathe until you're resting here with me... |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Lady....I thank you. I hope that inspiration will return to me and you may perhaps read more of me. Doreen.....I really do have to quit trying to make others that cannot feel...feel. It is uninpiring and tiring. snowpants....I do feel sometimes too much. I am trying to temper it. ethome.....hello again! Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Though, if one explores the depth of conversation beyond the fringe areas and past the fences we build around our existence, Absolutely wonderful! Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey stranger...there ya go again...every now and then you sneak back in here and "wow" us all again... "depth of conversation"? hmmm...would that there were some of that around here (and no, I do not mean the forum)...grin...welcome home, m'friend. Happy holidays to you. and a merry C |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh my...the depth of conversation leaves it all up to our imagination. love this wonderful piece. Charisma |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Serenity, Maree and Charisma I thank you. I have been to a place far too long that only appreciates what certain "leaders" say should be appreciated. This is home and you are family. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
RobertB...I think your words were made for me on this day. It amazes me how "not alone" I feel when reading your words and those of others, that in their own special way touch me deep inside my heart. Thank you for sharing your heart with us, and especially today. huggzz ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". ...Pope John Paul II |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Wynter, We are never alone. Whether online on in real life, we are never left to ourselves. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Thank you for sharing these thoughts, they are quite profound, makes one think. "If you live to be a hundred, I want to live to be a hundred minus one day, so I never have to live without you." Winnie the Pooh |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Thinking is poetry...poetry is thinking! Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Cassandra Junior Member
since 2000-12-16
Posts 48Charlotte, North Carolina, USA |
Enjoyable piece and beautifully written! Happy Holidays to you and yours! --Cassandra |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hi Cassandra...... I am so glad you enjoyed it. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Ramses Junior Member
since 2000-12-14
Posts 40Porsgrunn, Telemark, Norway |
RobertB... Isn`t it strange what lies hidden in the most secret of places? But only through searching for the keys to these private doors we can see the beauty or the sorrow whitin.... Great poem, keep sharing.. Ramses |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Ramses I agree......we just have to look to see secrets. Many never look. Robert if you can dream; you can fly...if you are flying; you are dreaming. |
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Words_of_Glitter Member
since 2000-10-25
Posts 90USA |
Wow, that was an amazing piece and it's so true. Most of the time, people ask, "How are you?" and don't care much to hear the reply. They just do it out of politeness, not concern. Your poem was about that...and you show a true understanding of the suffering of other human beings. How selfless. I loved this poem. One of the best that I've read in months. Wow...Wow. That's enough. "Do not marry the one that you can live with. Marry the one you cannot live without." |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
Hi Words.....it is a poem of true life. I know this wonderful girl and we were laughing at a party on a Saturday night. The next morning her sister was in the hospital near death. Just to look into her eyes from across the room told me that something terrible had happened since our laughter of the previous evening. Robert |
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