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Frozen Heart
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Masked Intruder
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since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets 
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Its creeping. Its slow descent from the frost encrusted glass takes it only inches from a lifeless plunge into snowbanks and concrete. Slowmotion enlargement of miniscule proportions decreasing with the flow of temperature, Dripping its deathmarch tears one by mournful one. A layered glass encasement envelops heartstruck frigidity, Masking spiderweb splinterings within its core. The sun climbs the snow shrouded horizon Casting killing light, destroying heat. Its frigid hold loosens, a shattering scream breaks the frozen silence; the icicle's perfection breaks into a thousand prismatic shards, Catching the morning's sunlight in a rainbow of emotions. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow MI!! this is quite a well imaged description of a frozen heart..... all kinds of places for the reader's mind to go...very very good indeed my friend!! [This message has been edited by ethome (edited 12-15-2000).] |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This could be one of my favorites of your work, MI... You've spun a wondrous visage here..  |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
how can I feel your frozen heart...you describe it so well Charisma |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
oh me, oh MY, MI! this one screams out the need of warmth for the melting of a wintered heart!! the last stanza, especially, got me... great lines here, my friend- "Its frigid hold loosens, a shattering scream breaks the frozen silence; the icicle's perfection breaks into a thousand prismatic shards, Catching the morning's sunlight in a rainbow of emotions." (i wanted to also thank you for your indepth response to my trilogy.... it was very special to me that you took all that time to read so deeply... i don't think i want to bring it back up to the top by responding on that thread, but i wanted to let you know how much i appreciated it. thank you!) |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Ethome- a reader's mind is my favorite thing to travel with. *grins* Thanks for the kind words. Teach- Thanks bunches, you've made it just a lot higher on my own favorite list! Thanks for reading. Charisma- A bundle of thankyous for reading and understanding! Doreen- Even your responses are wonderfully worded *grins*! Thanks for droppin in! And I told you one day I would give you a good response, I just happened to find the time at four in the morning *grins*! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
PERFECTPERFECTPERFECT...I'd keep it in the library except I keep hearing it say "read me again...." This is wonderful! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
"Its frigid hold loosens, a shattering scream breaks the frozen silence; the icicle's perfection breaks into a thousand prismatic shards, Catching the morning's sunlight in a rainbow of emotions." way to break free!!! ..oh how i love this..! youve written such cold and solid pain with an awesome pen...and nothing like the breaking free of such a place..!! youre use of available words were chosen well friend intruder..  VERY nice.. hugs, g "the beginning of wisdom is, 'i do not know'" -unknown |
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