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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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This is a story bout a grandpa and grandson, I walked proud beside him when I was young. I'd try to act older than a little kid walkin and talkin just like he did. Well I never asked for anything more than his love and he'd put his arm around me and call me Bub. Under blue skies where white clouds sailed he'd spin silk and magic into his tales. We had fishin poles, secret holes and worms in pails we scout old wood roads huntin whitetail. I heard campfire stories and I learned the truth about the great war that took Grandpa's youth. He'd say...remember son.... There's always someone out there givin out advice take care how you listen they might not have it right. And all the mighty leaders tellin poeple what to do are visions from the past where hell was set to rule So pray for the time man won't kill his fellow man keep the faith for peace and stay close to the land. And I'd sit there beaming by the campfire flame while an old hoot owl was callin out his name. And I'd think to myself we'll be doin this forever cause my Grandpa fought to make the world better. We strolled through Autumn leaves ans Summer grass and we talked of older times fillin out his past. We'd hike in the rain and watch shiny Otters playin with every day the same like forever was there waitin. When the golden years ended the golden bowl collapsed, I was never really ready and the hurt knocked me flat. And in the grief and pain I thought that I'd die but the memory of his tender words kept my soul alive. There's always someone out there giving out advice take care how you listen they might not have it right. And all the mighty leaders tellin people what to do are visions from the past where hell was set to rule. So pray for the time man won't kill his fellow man, keep the faith for peace and stay close to the land. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
ethome--this is a true and tenderly written poem...if this is about you..I think your grandpa would be proud of who you have become, and what he meant to you. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Oh Ethome...this brought a flow of tears...it brought back the memories of my own grandpa and the visions that I have of my son with my father...such beautifully woven thoughts...I'm sending this one on to my dad...I know it will touch his heart as it did mine. Thank you so much for sharing your gift of weave~ You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Excellent poem!  Enjoyed the read! |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
An absolutely priceless piece, ethome! I enjoyed the characteristic language, the easy, non-forced rhyme and the lovely tribute to your grandpa! Beautifully done!! |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Martie for those thoughts...much appreciated. Butterflies I hope your Dad enjoys and it will bring back some memories for him....thanks....ethome Thanks Insect for taking the time to read .. I appreciate it very much. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry I missed you VAS but thanks very much for the priceless comment I really appreciate it.......ethome.... |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Oh Ethome, this is so touching it had me with a tear... My sincere compliments PoetFriend on such a splendid heartfelt write... |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
you should always listen to your grandDad..this was great ethome...as always ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Ethome, I've been skimming past this because I wanted time to really enjoy it. And that's not to say the other poems I've replied to today I haven't enjoyed because I have, but I wanted to give this my full attention. This is a wonderful amazing piece of writing from you. Absolutely wonderful, so well drawn as a picture, so tender in it's story. I love this one as I've said before you just get better and better. Take care Mushy Marsha  Wonderful Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh ethome, this piece is so wonderful....I never have know my grandfathers from both side.....but reading your poem it made me wish that I had one....or at least a memory. Loved this excellent piece. ((hugs)) Charisma |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you for the wonderful reply Coco I really appreciate your input.. Victoria thanks so much for taking the time to read this poem about my Grandpa..I apprecaite it. Marsha..you are such a comfort to so many people with your kindhearted replies..such a beautiful heart you express...thanks again to you for your sweet thoughts..ethome |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
ethome, You can see the love you felt when you wrote this touching poem. It brings back many childhood memories.. and some tears. Very well down. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, ethome, and filled with excellent thoughts |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When the golden years ended the golden bowl collapsed, I was never really ready and the hurt knocked me flat. And in the grief and pain I thought that I'd die but the memory of his tender words kept my soul alive. There's always someone out there giving out advice take care how you listen they might not have it right. And all the mighty leaders tellin people what to do are visions from the past where hell was set to rule. So pray for the time man won't kill his fellow man, keep the faith for peace and stay close to the land. ================== OH E-BABES--this is sooooo...perfect ... so full of wisdom and poetic grace what a wonderful tribute... and that verse repetion was the sweet icing on the cake.. and my-oh-my the sweet wisdom of that verse... poetic truths set to rhyme... you are too cool for school  |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Missed me??? I don't understand. I'm right here. ;o} |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
You have written this with a style and a grace distinctly your own!!! It sure did bring back some great memories... I enjoyed it much Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Sigh...giving advice is so easy to do...taking it another question...but his advice was perfect...as is your poem...love this ethome... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Marsha that you for finally dropping in after skiping by I always appreciate your comments and thank you for the getting better shot in the arm..you truly are a sweetheart....ethome Thanks Rosepetals for the comments they're much appreciated...ethome Balladeer thank you so much for taking the time to read and for the encouraging words. Janet you're VANtastic comments are so much looked forward to...thanks for all your kindness my dear inspiration....love to hear from ya!! Charisma sorry to hear you didn't get to know them ...however the wonderful emotions you bring to us through your poetry makes me realize that you probably do know them in a certain refined way...ethome VAS...gotcha!! Thanks Peppermint for the very encouraging words...much appreciated...ethome... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, There's always someone out there giving out advice take care how you listen they might not have it right. then again they may be like you and have it exactly right. Perfect poem. Write on Kethry Why do yesterdays remain and todays pass by ...unnoticed? Rex E. Alford |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethome, thank you. I didn't have my grandpa around a lot...he died when I was only eight. But what time I did spend with him in his garage still brings a deep sense of love and a bond that parents never have with their kids...it goes a little beyond magic, I believe... I really liked this! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Kethry for the compliment I hope at least it's partially right...thanks again!! Sunshine even though you were only eight you still had the chance to know him ...and you're right it goes beyond magic..really!! Thanks so much for the reply. |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
ethome, this went deep for me. Thanks for sharing something I never experienced in my life. I would have liked to know my grandfather's a little like this. Thanks for the memory, Peace brother. Parker |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the read Parker gald you could appreciate some of it ....ethome |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Ethome, Well, what can I say. This has taken me and thrown me back in my seat. There is so much to learn from this masterpiece, I have tried for years to write something similar, and here youcome along and deliver it in perfection. Awesome, it is in my library now under lock and key. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Daniel for your oh so kind words I really appreciate them more than you know..thanks again....ethome............. |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 The repetition got me. (sob) I got through it OK the first time, but when you started quoting again your Granddaddy's wisdom... I just couldn't keep it in. We're trying to keep the faith. God Bless, Bob <><There's always someone out there giving out advice take care how you listen they might not have it right. And all the mighty leaders tellin people what to do are visions from the past where hell was set to rule. So pray for the time man won't kill his fellow man, keep the faith for peace and stay close to the land. |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I sometimes wonder if there are still some Grandpas who spend enjoyable time in nature with their grandchildren. This is so precious, and brings to light the great value of time and waxed wisdom in sincere love. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks for the comments Bob I'm so glad you appreciated them I thank you for such a emotional read...ethome... Thanks Sandgrain..I know that there are lots of Grand fathers that are taking time with their grandkids...mich more so than their own kids...it seems that they mellow out by the time they get grandkids and they want to spend some time with them....thanks ..ethome |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Ethome: You are such a wonderful poet and storyteller.....I love this piece you have written and I hope I get to enjoy lots more of your talented writing Roniece |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
ethome......very heartwarming work of words. Brought back some very fine memories to me. I thank you for that and for letting me read this nice piece of art. Alan |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thank you Roniece for your kind words and I hope we both have time to read each others work. Thanks Alan I appreciate the fact that you appreciate this poem and brought back memories...ethome. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Oh, haunting and poignant - beautifully and wonderfully written. Strong and bringing tears to my eyes for my lost grandpa. Still, wasn't he a treasure! Yet, I'm so sorry for your loss! The spiritual wind that holds survivors aloft, plants the seeds from which bloom new hope ... R.J.G. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
mmmm savoring the words... very nice sir |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Rosemary for the wonderful thoughts and I appreciate it so much I loved him dearly.....ethome Hey Walt thanks for the visit I really like the comment...ethome |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I really loved this Ethome, my grandfather was the single most imoportant person in my life and Ihave missed him more than I can say the last 20 years. Mine called me Pumpkin, and he called my oldest daughter, his first great grandchild, Pumpkinn Seed He was an extraordinary man as I am sure yours was, thanks for sharing this wonderfully touching poem |
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Rainydays Member
since 2000-10-21
Posts 324 |
ethome, hello. This is a treasure of a poem, well written and poignant, and that it is a true tale makes it all the better. What a gift he was to you and you to us. Thank you ~ Rainydays |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Beki I'm so glad to hear of your experience and I appreciate your warm comments.......ethome Thanks Rainydays for the kind thoughts and for for your gift to me...ethome |
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