Open Poetry #11 |
Holding My Breath |
Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Entrusted truth of morning hue does paint un-erringly dispelled on blade of grass be-jeweled with dew what light of moon as breath expelled Does paint un-erringly dispelled within enlightened form exist ? What light of moon as breath expelled will dawn unto you hallowed tryst ? Within enlightened form exist . A radiance of light revealed . Will dawn unto you , hallowed tryst , apart from darkest night concealed . A radiance of light revealed expressed through your endeavors may , apart from darkest night concealed , shine through to guide you in this way . On blade of grass be-jeweled with dew were I to paint with breath of moon , I'd stay the brush for fear I'd ruin entrusted truth of morning hue . |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hey Doc~ this is fantastic! "A radiance of light revealed expressed through your endeavors may , apart from darkest night concealed , shine through to guide you in this way ." Wow.....this is just so neat! -SEA |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Just beautiful...exquisite form and words. Well done. |
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ParisGrl Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 610 |
Doc, I loved this poem and the way it flows. exquisite piece of work. ~Laura~ |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
SEA , Elizabeth , ParisGrl, Thanks , this form is definitely a challenge ( no matter how easy "some people" make it look ). Do not be decieved . Were it not for all help I've recieved by being a part of this place , my words would be as meaning-less gibberish ( which come to think of it , they're not too far away from being anyway ). Glad you enjoyed ! Doc |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
you have my total admiration. Until you've tried this? You really can't appreciate it...and you DO make it look easy...Paradelle hell indeed. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* *sigh* oh gosh this heart will never be the same again. How beautiful this poem filled me. Much love to you from me. Love I leave with you my friend whether it be in your life or of yet the essense of your dreams. http://path2riches.com |
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