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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Thinking about the way your voice slides over my skin warm as butter melting over French toast the way your fingers tangle in my hair hard, demanding, pulling me close for the kiss that leaves me breathless and Thinking about running barefoot through the puddles after the rain warm and wet your hand in mine making angels in the snow and sledding on the hill arms tight around you licking melted marshmellow from your lips and Thinking about dancing in the moonlight held close to your heart the way you sing to me soft and low and your kiss, your kiss Thinking about YOU you know |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
the hook on this is AWESOME. i was hooked right after the first three lines. i was just compelled to finish, but once i was in, i couldn't stop anyways! the images were beautiful... i like the second stanza about the rain and the winter. magnificent pictures... what a well penned poem... the rhythm was very crisp. i dig it. "The bar is always open, the time is always right. If God's good word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, Paula this is just wonderful. Shows all the love you have for this person, in such a perfectly flowing poem. Sandra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Paula this is so good.... wow! heart on the sleeve work man what a delight to read and absorb the intimacy of this work!! Write on!! dear girl write on!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
ooooooh ... I like the way your mind works  very cool poem P-girlie ...sensual and teasing ... I like the creative way you present this too. well done ... smooth like butter mmm mmm mmm later-frenchtoast-gator jm Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Wonderfully presented in a very unique format. Loved not only that but the way it captivates the reader and urges on. Beautifully penned in every way. One of your best. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Evening Paula, I can feel your emotions coming through as I read this writing. My, I certainly liked this very, very much. Way to go! BC |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Ethan...wow...what an awesome response...thank you my friend...I'm glad you liked this Sandra...he is rather special...thank you ethome...thank you coming from you this is quite a compliment Janet...hehehe...thank you sweetie Mark...thank you having you read is always an honour Bill...thank you for dropping by sir...Im glad you like this |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Filled with sensories that are well perceived!! Well done!! |
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Lady Lightning Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 422Kentucky |
Wow, Paula...I really, really liked this...  What sweet images I had in my head with every line. ~LL~ The way to love anything is to realize it might be lost. author unknown |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
VAS...well I was feeling very sensuous when I wrote it...thank you Lady Lightning...mmm thanks I appreciate yout sweet words |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Paula love, this is wonderful, you are writing so well, this is one of your best love. An absolute joy to read and it flows so smoothly. Do I love this, YES I DOBrilliant it really and truly is Take care Mushy (Now love hand over those shoes, please )Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
I like this one so much that I thought I'd send it back up there after another read. |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Marsha...you sweet thing you...thanks ethome...aaawwww thank you sweet poet man...Im glad you liked it well enough for another read... |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
WOW bravo!!!! got some real warm fuzzys off this one. Thank you for taking me on the trip with you love and light, Richard |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
oh Paula, this is a warm loving piece....wonderful expressed....love it ((hugs)) Charisma |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Paula this is high on the sensual scale...the needle is going crazy...James |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
Richard...why thank you sir...you can come on this trip anytime you like...just give me a holler Charisma...thank you sweet lady... James...I thought you might enjoy this one...heheeh |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
Paula, So much in here, the thoughts you portray are so very real. Loved this all along. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love (Daniel J D) |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
This piece flowed very well Paula....wonderful write! Nathan |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Oh WOW! I think I am a bit hungry now! *L* I LOVE the way you put this together... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
PAULA, fabulous my friend this is such a captivating poem... To my library it shall go my thanks to you for providing this most enjoyable read tonite... coco |
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