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This Key |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Key The church was cold and empty and all around was dark and I could see as I walked in the stained glass of Him, he wore a crown of light and was surrounded in color. The air hummed around me, in the pointed wooden rafters I heard breath and the old creak of joints. I walked alone down the isle with flowers held on my shoulder, down the maroon carpet past empty pews that sighed and almost stumbled on the steps leading to the alter. I turned in my opening feeling and looked around, for this was the house of God and I was bringing him flowers. I could hear the cars on the street outside and I felt that maybe I should be afraid but I wasn’t, I was glad to be here just me and some magnificence and the quiet of some peace that enfolded and the color came from outside steaming across in purple and scarlet canary yellow and cobalt blue, the color led me back down the stairs to other places and I thought how lucky I was to have this key |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What a lovely, peaceful scene...I am glad you are the holder of the key... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is beautiful, Martie, and that's no malar-key  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
for this was the house of God and I was bringing him flowers. just me and some magnificence and the quiet of some peace that enfolded and the color came from outside steaming across in purple and scarlet canary yellow and cobalt blue, the color led me back down the stairs to other places and I thought how lucky I was to have this key ======================== seems like a little trade of poetic justice... you brought Him flowers and he gave you the return of divine inspiration this is such a cool write Martie gator... serenity from your view and your pen... to my smile... see ...now its the gift that keeps on giving. thanks *smile* me Some people find subtlety in strangers if you find anything~let me in Your eyes~you see everything my eyes~I see it all together now~and I know |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I feel like you just delivered the sweetest bouquet ... What a serenely lovely piece of writing. 'and I thought how lucky I was to have this key' I'm glad you have it too.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wonderful Martie! This poem dances...and I can almost see the windows.. enjoyed the read as usual... K |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
I'm glad you've got the key, too! Much enjoyed. Dee I wish you every happiness and pray you'll always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
and i found this all by myself ...lolanother facet of you Martie .. nice metaphor.. nice poem thanks P |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a wonderfully inspirational piece Martie ... indeed to hold this key, is to hold peace and serenity. Lovely writing! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Martie, this is utterly beautiful, such serenity, such delight. This is wonderful and I love it, I truly do. Take care Mushy Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
So beautiful and serene Martie thank you for sharing such a peaceful moment Maree "If my words could blanket the skies and fill every corner and crevice of this earth, still this wouldn't be enough" "Maree Russo" |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Matthew 16:19 Matthew 16 Matthew 16:18-20 And I will give unto thee the keys of the kingdom of heaven: and whatsoever thou shalt bind on earth shall be bound in heaven: and whatsoever thou shalt loose on earth shall be loosed in heaven..... Yes, and we know where we received this key and others as well, Martie, this is so special..... "Always be a first rate version of your self instead of a second rate version of someone else." Marilyn Monroe |
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maxtec1 Senior Member
since 2000-12-09
Posts 577Garland, Tx |
The key you speak of fits more than doors and locks. I loved this poem. Great job. Love and Light, Richard |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Today is Sunday - and I'm home - it is 11 Am - I should be standing with the choir as loving friends and I join in raising our voices to Him and my thoughts continue to wander there - Our church is 150 years old - it does 'creak' and it has a warm intimacy - all things I especially felt as I read your words - I have a key - literally and figuratively I know I will be back there soon - but I needed this this morning - thank you very much |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karilea--thanks for the sunshine. Balladeer-- Janet--I'm glad this gave you a smile...cause your reply gave me one. Marge--thanks for being so sweet. Kamla--Nice to see you...it's been awhile. Thanks for stopping by. Dee--Thank you for such a nice reply. Philip--Another facet, you think? I'm glad you found this on your own....thank you. Kit--A sweet reply, thank you. Marsha--Thanks for your enthusiasm. Maree--I'm glad you enjoyed the peace. Kathleen--Thank you for the special quote...appreciate your nice reply. Richard--Yes, I suppose you're right...thank you. Bill--I hope you will be returning soom...I'm sure they miss your lovely voice...thanks for such a sweet reply. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
and the color came from outside steaming across in purple and scarlet canary yellow and cobalt blue, the color led me back down the stairs to other places and I thought how lucky I was to have this key Martie, a beautiful and serene poem. very peaceful. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
brian--I'm so glad to see you...I hope that you will be around for a little while...I've missed you! Thanks for your reply! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
I think maybe you were given a bouquet at the same time my friend. Maybe not one you can see in a vase but definitely one that you can feel and smell in your heart. Amazing how things work isn't it? Beautiful my friend and just the perfect way once again to end my session here today. Hopefully I will be back tonight and find another of yours to go to sleep with, but just in case, I think I will hold onto this one. Hugs and love to you my dear friend. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Just adding to my library my friend. What's that?????? Oh yeah, ALL of yours automatically go in there. Well then, I just came by to say HOWDY!!!!!!!  A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful scene Martie!......love the peacefulness and spiritual depth....love the rendering of the light and colors.... great key to have to gather some thoughts...love the poem!! ethome |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Martie~ A very special key indeed. Lovely poem. Deb |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
The key to peace is not always found. This is an extrordinary poem. Just like all your writings Liz |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Mark--thanks for coming back twice...and hugs and love to you, my friend. I'm always glad to see you ethome...thank you for such a lovely reply. Deb-yes it is special, thank you. Liz--We all have the key to peace, but finding it is not always easy, you're right...so glad to see you, my friend. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is lovely... both metaphorically and literally. *S* I grew up in the country (okay, the sticks *S*) where no one locks their doors... and was overwhelmed by sadness when I learned that the churches had to be locked in order to be insured... the ones most in need might not know how to find the key. |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Martie-What a lovely piece and beautiful imagery. Nicely done. |
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