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The Pup
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The Pup |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
The alpha wolf slowly descends Into the barren canyon below His paws softly pad along The path beside the river's flow Through the deep shadows Of the forest at night A sudden flash of movement Catches his keen sight Then the rustling of leaves Travels through the thick brush A small lonely wolf pup Jumps onto the path with a rush The alpha wolf freezes in his tracks Dumbstruck by the pup's lack of smarts Anything could have been travelling this route Including a bear that could've ripped him apart The old wolf scolds the foolish young pup All the way back to their den Another mooonlit winter's night They'll travel this way once again Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The Lone Wolf knows how to write poem stories about the wild wolf.. I enjoyed this..I love poems about nature and the wild...I like the part where the pup jumps out into the path I can just picture that...really great stuff!! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah yes...wolves, forests, shadows, canyons...I like this too much! Nice story! |
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Celeste Senior Member
since 2000-11-11
Posts 597 |
An excellent job bringing this to life. Reminded me of that book "The Loop" - a favorite of mine. Thank you for sharing! To capture and live a moment is truly living |
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Lighthousebob Member Elite
since 2000-06-14
Posts 4725California |
 Us young pups always getting in trouble, thank goodness for the Alpha Wolf who watches over us to protect us from evil. Hey, I kinda like these nature stories as well. Bob <>< |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Great story. We all need some one to watch us at time....truely enjoyed the read. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ You are so gifted. Such appreciation for the natural wonder of the wolf ... I wish more were so concerned and gentle in their feelings. This is just a precious write. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I see these works as your signature piece, you do them so very well my friend! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
LW- and THIS is why i love your poetry so much. when you are writing about these graceful creatures, it comes alive on the page. enjoyed this very much! take care. ~amy~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Jennifer, you have an insight!!! "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
LW* This is awesome my friend!! I can't wait to have Katrina read this she will love it too!! Take care of you  You cannot dance in the sun until you have cried in the rain~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you have that gift for telling stories of the wild and of nature. . . this is no exception. . . wonderful. . . ----------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
ethome . . . Thank you very much. I am glad you enjoyed. These poems are my favorite also. Passing Shadows . . . Ah yes, the wonders of nature. Enjoy!! dreamkeeper . . . I love that book!! You are welcome for sharing and thank you for the compliment. Bob . . . The alpha wolf knows and sees all.  Glad you like this.Alan . . . Thanks and yes we do!! Marge . . . Aw shucks, I just write 'em as I see 'em. They are beautiful creatures who are often misunderstood. Although they are not really our enemy, we are all too often theirs. I wish more were concerned as well. Maybe just once I can lend some insight to one who does not understand and then I will have made a difference. Thank you, my friend. EagleOne . . . My friend, they just come to me like a vision. I try to do my best to describe then accurately. Thank you. Amy . . . Thank you!! They are graceful and I hope I do them justice. Kathleen . . . Thank you my friend. BDC . . . Happy you like it. I hope Katrina does as well. They are beautiful creatures. Take care my friend. Sven . . . Thank you for the kind words. Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Jen~ I have done some back logging tonight and I'm glad I got to veiw this one, it is a wonderful story and the images so vivid...well done my friend Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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