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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I know of affirmations that I should recite, and even words I find absurd incite me in the night. My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, judge and jury notwithstanding... voices echo in my mind. Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept... voices mocking in my mind. Bridges leading anywhere Taxi cabs are at my door The roads curve long in sweet "come on" my soul in ache to taste of more... voices beckon in my mind. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I hear them too Serenity...and you've put it forth quite well... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
serenity,,,wow! The words are great but this rhyme scheme and tempo that you use is outstanding!!! I bow to your creativity...  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Heed the voices...follow your dream!!! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Wonderful! Well said. Live for love. Without love, you don't live. |
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liquidphantasy Junior Member
since 2000-12-04
Posts 15california |
"Silences that should be kept Stifled tears that should be wept volcano grows beneath the rug where my memories were swept..." Excellent stanza. This is a powerful piece! I think I hear those same voices! Question is, listen to them? or tell them to shut-up!? Well, that's my dilemma with them anyway. Thanks for posting this fine piece of writing.  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity, this is wonderful writing, it really is an excellant piece from you. It is utterly wonderful, and I love it. Take care Mushy Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I know of affirmations that I should recite, and even words I find absurd incite me in the night. My subconscious, reprimanding, living in the flesh, demanding, judge and jury notwithstanding... voices echo in my mind. =================== my soul in ache to taste of more... ================ OH BABY ... me could kiss ya for this one... and look at me girlie playing with her rhyme and I am loving this and you KNOW it ... what an awesome write sen ... as is the poet who wrote it ... *kisskiss* baby and those voices your hearing... they speak pure poetry me sweet I looked into the sky for my anthem The words and music came through But words and music can never touch the beauty that I've seen Looking into you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thank you much Karilea...you spread your sunshine daily, and you are one of the most hardest working poets I've known!!!I do appreciate your unfailing kindness. Michael...I'm so glad that you like this!!! It is because of your kind and thoughtful instruction that I even dare...and I confess, this time? I TRIED to please you! Hugs and thanks m'friend!!! Sharon...follow that dream...lol..I'm the girl who likes to read the last page first...but, make ya a deal...you be brave and me? I'll be behind ya, every step of the way! I thank you much, Interloper...I do appreciate your reading me. liquidphantasy? ooh. Yes. It does get noisy in there...sometimes, I even have to take the "spot"...lol. I appreciate your understanding and thank you for your reply. Marsha, marsha marsha....you are so sweet and so kind and so poetic that it's impossible not to adore you! Thank you much, and the good poetic people you work with. You are all a delight! Janet Marie? what's the bumper sticker? "I do whatever the voices tell me to do..." lol...and a few of them? just won't take the damned lithium!!! (j/k folks) YEAH. SURE.... thanks again, love to you all. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You have multitudes of conversations with yourself??... I can relate... Occasionally some things even get resolved.... Very nicely done, serenity..  |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Serenity, I wish the voices in my head were half as poetic as yours, wonderfully written piece. standing ovation to your pen and those voices you hear. Continue to heed them. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"my soul in ache to taste of more..." Wow! Powerful words Serenity ... loved this. So many emotions you've evoked ... do I, don't I, too many voices at once ... have you been peeking into my mind too? Great writing, and loved the flow in this piece! Best wishes, /Kit |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hey..after Nan wipes the "smooches" off her cheek? and many thank yous..,.brian...MY GOD I MISS YOU>>> post a thousand? will ya? (love nan too...) |
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