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What Might Transpire when you Believe
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What Might Transpire when you Believe |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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What Might Transpire when you Believe he spoke of having no feelings nothing that left him open to reeling nothing that he found very appealing until he heard her voice singing nothing had left him open to reeling nothing had he found very appealing until he heard her voice, singing suddenly pure joy she was bringing nothing he had found was appealing until he heard her voice, singing sudden, purest joy she was bringing emphatic, sadness began leaving when he heard her voice, singing sudden pure joy to him then bringing and emphatically, sadness began leaving and he wondered at the loss of grieving sudden pure joy to him she was bringing and emphatically, sadness began leaving and he pondered at the loss of grieving and instead began to reason in believing Emphatically, sadness was leaving No longer pondering the loss of grieving Instead he welcomed all of the believing Knowing she would never be leaving And he loved her. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Don't think you will find him complaining either. This was wonderfully written and the ending was as it should be. Thanks for the opportunity to read such a wonderfully happy piece. A life with love will have some thorns, but a life without love will have no roses. author unknown |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
"Instead he welcomed all of the believing Knowing she would never be leaving And he loved her." Says it all for me - but without the prior verses - it could not be half as beautiful - great use of repeating form! |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
You make me just want to stand up and shout I DO BELIEVE I DO BELIEVE....lovely ma'am just lovely Ignore those who would clip your wings...fly ever upward...even if it means scorched wings |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Such a difficult thing to do and you make it look easy, sunshine. I admire your abilities...  |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Mark, no, I don't believe he'll ever stop believing, now...thanks for coming in to read...glad to see you back... Mr. Yeats...you do have a way with a compliment don't you? {~,^}...thank you... Paula...c'mon over here...there's a little Tinkerbelle who's waiting to hear from you... 'Deer...wish I knew if you are referring to the poem...or the gist of the message...if I had either, they would be true gifts...{~,^} but thank you... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
i love this..gives one a very nice warm feeling..  ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Kari, this is fantastic, and I do believe of course I do. Love this one, and yes you knew I'd say that. Brilliant work Kari kid excellant, and you believe too. Take care Majestic Marsha Take back the hope you gave,- I claim Only a memory of the same Robert Browning |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautifully done, Karilea! Very nice! Denise |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Victoria, Marsha, Denise...thank you all very much... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Reading your poem has me reeling it has left me with very good feeling oh my happy heart has begun singing your poem is so very appealing. ============================== Glad I didn't miss this one < !signature-->Live for love. Without love, you don't live. [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 12-08-2000).] |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
SUNSHINE, I'm siding with Paula's response here so bear with me I really enjoyed this poem and I really wanna say this to you... A poem like this I'd head out rite now unbolt that door and down frontsteps and stand upon cement with arms in air and gaze above to the stars of nite and open lips and shout aloud... I BELIEVE I BELIEVE I BELIEVE... On a serious note oh I was being serious, anyways, once again sweetie you show your talent with poetry like this... siiiiiiiiiiiiighing endlessly |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Interloper...I am glad you didn't, either...thank you...{~,^} Coco...don't forget to clap...you're too sweet! Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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