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Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

0 posted 2000-12-07 02:14 PM

I have been
under you.
Loving you,
neglecting me.
I have been
behind your back,
in that dark
I knew so well.

I was once your
sweetest angel, your
shining friend.
I had it all
and everything
Till the melody’s end.

Then the music stopped
and the people left.
I was the only one,
only one around.
Left dancing with memories
of a forgotten kiss.

Now I’m trapped,
a long lost memory.
A darkened part of your past,
you can’t erase.

In Your mind
You can’t forget.
Forget that rainy day
You had left me
Along the way.

Wobbly Head Bob
Member

since 2000-05-15

Posts 299
Virginia, USA

1 posted 2000-12-07 03:54 PM

I know this theme all too well, my friend. And you point out that memories remain on both ends, and no one forgets, I like that. Hearts don't really break, they just bend a little...the hurt is all the same, nice writing.

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

2 posted 2000-12-07 09:23 PM

Thanks.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2000-12-07 09:27 PM

This brought the tears to my eyes and re-opened an ache for my once best friend, I still miss him so much...... excellent write

-SEA

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

4 posted 2000-12-08 09:42 AM

No true friend should ever be forgotten, or neglected....such sorrowful words

What is that you express in your eyes? It seems to me more than all the words I have read in my life.

Walt Whitman

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

5 posted 2000-12-08 12:34 PM

SEA- I'm sorry I would never want to do anything to bring tears to your eyes. I'm a bad bad boy.

I.R.- You are so right.

[This message has been edited by Effigy (edited 12-08-2000).]

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

6 posted 2000-12-09 03:34 PM

Effigy~

so honest and full of pain. enjoyed the
read though immensly...keep writing dear
poet, the pain in time begins to ease.

take care.
~amy~

forne_marin
Member

since 2004-04-13

Posts 140
Spartanburg, South Carolina

7 posted 2004-05-07 10:31 AM

I'm going to use a terrible word, and it's "nice". This poem is nice. I enjoyed it. It had a nice sense of melancholy and came off as not too terrible sappy.

For a love poem, this wasn't so bad, but you and I both know you can do much better.

I believe the most important component of a poem is rhythm. Rhythm is the heartbeat of a poem. It is what makes poetry poetry.

Effigy
Member

since 2000-04-11

Posts 486
disbelief

8 posted 2004-05-08 11:29 AM

Well comeon give me a break. You know it's not my real style.

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