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Fast Lane Livin'
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Fast Lane Livin' |
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deleeme Senior Member
since 1999-10-09
Posts 1766NEW ENGLAND, USA 
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Fast lane livin' I gotta see it all, Even though so much is blurry Better this than just a crawl, Those awful traffic jams Just make me want to bawl, Fast lane livin' I hear the highway's call! Fast lane livin' No exits in sight, Then I look at my gas gague And it says "E" alright, Oh How do I allow me To get in such a plight? Fast lane livin' No time to see the light! Fast lane livin' I hear it's all the rage, Of our fast paced world The product of our age, If I could just go faster I'd turn me a new page, Fast lane livin' Cop please, let me outta this cage! ZOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMM!!!  >>>>>>  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This piece has a pace about it that descries the fast life... Nice job, deleeme.. and nice to see you over here in Open... Sometimes you just have to run out of gas before you slow down, eh??..  |
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Dennis L. White Senior Member
since 2000-02-17
Posts 1463Michigan, U.S.A. |
David, I liked the pace and the tongue-in-cheek humor in this poem, but you have characterized many in our society, Speed and greed and God help you if you get in their way. Good read! Dennis :^) Moonbeams radiate When the veiling cloud has passed Playful shadows dance Dennis L. White :^) |
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inot2B Member Elite
since 2000-09-18
Posts 2205Arkansas |
Well, this explains alot about a certain poem I read in The Corner Pub. Now I understand why your wife is put out with you. Slow down and watch for DEER who cross on the open road. LOL |
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ellie LeJeune Member Elite
since 2000-01-10
Posts 4156King of Prussia, PA USA |
david; boy, it made me nervous just reading this...I've never been very attracted to this fast stuff much....just a slow plodder I guess You did a great job here of making it sound crazy and that's what it is! Love, sis Belief is a truth held in the mind; faith is a fire in the heart. Joseph Fort Newton |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Hahaha - And this is why I like country livin'.... only one lane and it's not fast...Great poem David. Bonnie |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
David, LOL. Cute poem. Life seems to find a way to slow us down when we forget to do it ourselves. Hope you didn't have to walk too far!! LW Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
David, this had a cute and funny edge to it! really enjoyed reading this piece. so how long did that mean old cop lock you up for?! LOL  great poem! take care.~amy~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very creative, David! Cute! Denise |
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