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Ocean Watching
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Ocean Watching |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware 
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Ocean Watching Just before twilight Just before sunset We sit on the sand Watching the sea Watching the waves Make a gentle roll to shore And a soft break on the sand Whispering Fingers twining Sitting close We've dismissed the world Thoughts only Of what brought us here Only now, Only this moment The sun's depth Adds color to your face The chill air Huddles us closer Friends, but more Our kiss is deep Sweet breaths mingle The taste ambrosia You fill my eyes My heart My hands We blend In liquid profusion As the sun sets fire To the sea At twilight At sunset We sit on the sand Watching the waves There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~Janet Mar |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Very romantic! Beautiful poem!  Nice begining for 11. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Congrats Mr. Yeats on being the first to post here....many shall follow in your shoes.... and I think I am becoming tiresome to you in stating "well done, Sir"...but I shall, anyway... well done on a poem that brings back lovely memories... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Bill, there is no place I'd rather be than sitting in love by the sea....... oh you capture my love of the sea, the romance, the peacefulness when sitting there.....just listening. Well done my friend. *s* On the wings of words our spirits fly, and our souls are free. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Great poem Mr. Yeats. I think probably the lines..."we sit on the sand, watching the waves" are a whole story all by themselves. jwesley |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Bill--watching the sun set into the ocean is one of life's greatest pleasures, and to do it with one you love...ah, tis magic. Beautifully written! |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
WY, Well done, a beautiful write. |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Sir Poet Bill* You weave romance and beauty like none other...this is soooooo....*sigh* enchantingly beautiful~ |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
ah, the Ocean does give you that romantic fantasy, two lovers walking in the waves sharing a night together, beautiful |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
perfectly written beautiful poetry I truly loved this. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Everyone - I'm truly gratified by all your wonderful responses - Let me simply say thank you so much. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
WY~ you have penned my heart here.......I love the ocean and all the wonderful romantic notions that go with it.......This is beautiful and very romantic *SIGH* -SEA |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
love the romantic imagery....love the whole poem.... Charisma |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
if i only had an ocean in amarillo ha..i use to love to do that in hawaii..loved it bill ~Victoria~ A poem is never finished, only abandoned. - Paul Valery (1871-1945) |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
SEA - Charisma - Victoria - Thank you -Nothing I love more than the shore with a loved one- I never have a problem writing about it |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Wilfred, there's not much this reader can add that hasn't been expressed above already, other than, I'm so pleased I got a chance to read this poem  You have captured the essence of LoveNseashore exquisitely PoetFriend.. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Now - THAT's my idea of fun... Nice job, Wil..  |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Coco - ~big smile~ (for the poetfriend) and Thank you (bigger smile) Nan - In light of responses to Mark's thoughts on 'R' I'm even more delighted than I would be otherwise by your response to this  Thank you so much  |
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Paula Finn Member Ascendant
since 2000-06-17
Posts 5546missouri |
It would be such a pleasure to sit by the sea with you...watching the world change second by second as the sun sets...beautiful |
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peppermint35 Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1106Texas, USA |
Lovely and soooo romantic!!! Pepper "A poem is the very image of life expressed in its eternal truth." Percy Bysshe Shelley |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
Paula - Sunsets on the water can be exquisite - thank you Pepper - I'm glad you liked - thank you - I'll try to measure up |
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