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My Why Of Rhyme
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My Why Of Rhyme |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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My why of rhyme I've been told the limit of rhyme And asked to try free verse some time. Write of close and personal flings In other words of worldly things. And I would fill this simple plead But I've been shell shocked from the deed. I'll offer you some clear vermouth And the slightest sip of my truth. Would you hear of my Isabel The rapper of my life time hell? Or would you out privy dragons And sip some fire from those flagons? Or would you hear my crimes of war The haunts of demons that I store? Of holding death close in my arms The short of breath the tears the psalms. Why would you dare so close to me Why would I give this hell to thee? I cannot solve this paradox Ever though I am orthodox. I rhyme to hear a soft of shoal A tranquil whisper to my soul. It dulls the razor edge of why This childish rhyme like lullaby. I'd rather this then feted spit To rock my cradle in this pit. |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I agree - I've gotta rhyme to, Sy..  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
From you, yes... quote: always... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Seymour-I understand. A rhyme to ease ones pain. Of lifes' tearful game. Peace my friend, and I liked this one. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
From the one who couldn't rhyme if her life depended on it!!! I like this a lot..SY!! The mix of free verse and rhyme was good!! "I rhyme to hear a soft of shoal A tranquil whisper to my soul. It dulls the razor edge of why This childish rhyme like lullaby" I liked this part expecially too  I sometimes cannot read rhyme cuz, it seems to structured or something...strange huh But, then I always seem to be in the minority in my abilities...be it writing, drawing, etc. I cannot usually do what the majority can....does that make me strange?? Just a thought!! Well, no more rambling...so I shall go!! Bridgette < !signature-->"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown [This message has been edited by Justbleu (edited 10-10-2000).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
it 'tis a need ... to bleed in rhyme to be freed of curse ... write rhythm in verse divine ************** and few do do it better than you SY-guy and you KNOW I crave rhyme... and yours suits me fine...  LOVE this cool poem!!!! later-king-of-cadence-gator jm |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymore, I like this I really do, there's reason in your rhyme. (sorry couldn't resist) Very well written, and rhymes so well!! Marsha XXXXXXX |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Sir Tabin... For the most part my work falls in rhyme, but there are those times when it just falls all over the place... sort of a semi-structured chaos. It is at those times I write some of my darker themes... and I for one have had very little darkness in my life to draw upon. I believe if I had ever really had to live amongst the hinted shadows of your life, I would probably only write in rhyme as well. May you find and always keep peace at your side. I bow to you and yours. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I'm with you all the way. *L* Sy Sunshine, Thank you karilea. *L* Gemini, THank you for the read and nice comment. Justbleu, Thank you for the nice rambling. JM, Thank you my talented later gator. Marsha, Thank you for the nice comment and the XXXX's Andrew, I thank you for the genuflect. |
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SEA 
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Seymour~ this is perfect! -SEA |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ You do it with pizazz ... Whatever it is that you do. And a rhyme-in-time is just The perfect fit for you ! Big hugs, my friend. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sea, Maybe 99 percent LOL Thanks. Marge, Love your comments and you. Sy |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Sy you do it well yuh |
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