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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Silence Silence, a siren blaring through my head and like a mirrorball it spins shades of madness that leak through fingers fanned, over my face deep down the dusky shadows of my mind I see you there highlighted by twilight’s spotlight, yes I see the sprinkle of dust happening you are beginning to look old amazing that you, would sit there alone cross-legged in the corner like a ragged doll, waiting for me to pick you up but you see, the silence occupies me. Angel of Darkness 5/10/2000 |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
DA beautiful poem! Oh how I wish that silence occupied me right now!  (you know what I mean) read this at the wrong time, will have to come back and read it again, when I'm in a different frame of mind. Sorry hon. Hugs! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Maree--So much silence lately...and it is so loud...like this poem. |
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fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
This is a lovely piece,the fire within the words burns brightly,well done. |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Awesome poem Maree, the words create such a vivid picture within my mind. It is so hauntingly beautiful - well done. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
maree another pretty compelling poem .... i see where you were headed with this, but i feel it might be worth a bit more work. Lines like: "it spins shades of madness that leak through fingers fanned" are simply terrific...  MP |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
silence is so much more than just silence. love the way you describe it Charisma |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
There is a certain darkness about this piece....maybe your name does suit you. Interesting writing. parker |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i would say i love this poem but i am currently keeping my silence yuh yuh |
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jlocke Member
since 2000-09-10
Posts 169CC,TX |
 Silence |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
 Brava! Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP Most people would rather die than think; in fact, they do so. B. Russell |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hey Angel, No Problem Dear, heheh I wish I could've passed some silence through the puter for ya Thanks for readin hon Martie, yeah it's been kinda like that. Thankf for reading Hi Fool, thank you so much for you lovely reply Hi J, I am glad you liked it Dear Thanks MP, yes you are right, It does need a bit more work Thank you for your comment I appreciate it hon Charisma, happy to be pleasin you Thanks so much.Interesting you should say that Haleyja Thank you for your lovely reply Walty, yuh yuh you do that!!! Thanks hon jloke, Smokin Thank You JP, I'm Brava? wow, Molto Grazie! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Incredible imagery here, sista! I especially loved the first stanza---a mirrorball, indeed...very strong visual, that. Awesome. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
and i am beginning to feel old so old that i can in fact no longer sit cross legged- instead i lean in the corner like a nonjointed doll waiting for you to pick me up but i see your silence occupies you Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Girl - can I have some of what you have? To alleviate this writer's block I'm in? LOL Wonderful, it's wonderful. (One thing - don't like 'head' in the third line - now you know what I'd suggest hey? Yup - mind...lollol... )Hugs Mmy. K |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Little DA~ You are positively amazing This piece is just devine...excellent writings my friend Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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