My Halloween Challenge Response

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Open Poetry #10

My Halloween Challenge Response

The Lonely Stranger
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since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

0 posted 2000-10-04 05:00 AM

Okay, I don't usually repond to challenges because I write when I am inspired. So I figured I'd try one. This is my entry. If you look closely, you will see a special touch. I did something sneaky and I wonder who can see it. If you see it, e-mail me so you don't ruin it for the others

Bodies piled up like logs,
Lustful teens get slain.
Once we kept the blood and guts
On the screens within our brains.

Dracula has lost his touch,
You have to show us more.
Mummies do not frighten us
Unless they come with gore.

Renfield or a flock of birds
Did the trick so long ago.
Evil used to scare us until
Reality stole the show.

Some men see things as they are and ask "WHY ?" I see things as they could be and ask "WHY NOT ?"

The Lonely Stranger
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since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

1 posted 2000-10-04 07:34 AM

Melton Culberth picked out the "twist" first. Well dome sir !! Remember if you DO find the "twist" let me know via e-mail, but if you wanna pick my poem apart feel free to do so in the "light of day"

insect
Senior Member

since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

2 posted 2000-10-04 08:53 AM

Creative writing for Halloween!
Sad about reality though.
Yes I see it.

The Lonely Stranger
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since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

3 posted 2000-10-04 09:14 AM

Based on the icon you added after you typed "I see it !" I beilieve that you DO.
Very good, pretty simple twist though.

TLS

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

4 posted 2000-10-04 04:02 PM

Lonely Stranger,
fantasy might be scary, but reality Bytes.
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

The Lonely Stranger
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

5 posted 2000-10-05 08:26 AM

Indeed, realty does now byte.

Kethry also found my seemingly not so well hidden twist

TLS

[This message has been edited by The Lonely Stranger (edited 10-05-2000).]

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