Open Poetry #10 |
Heartpain |
Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
This is my first poem that I have written in english, and I think that no one is waiting for it, but well here it is....and I have edit it recently. Heartpain My heart screams out loud, I can't stand the pain, when you decided, to get lost in vain. Why...my child have you, hurt me this way, and just make me cry, day after day. Couldn't we always telling each other, secrets from the heart between daughter and mother? Haven't I raised you up with love and with care? learned you to walk, to talk and also beware, surround you with love in your struggle of life, you walked never alone in every strife. But than someone came and stole your heart away, treated him as our own son, didn't had any idea, that he would betray our love, pretending asking your hand, and happy as we were for you, we give our consent. Why haven't we seen, right up from the start, the lies in his eyes, to let us fallen apart, suddenly you decided to make a new start, and left us behind to follow your heart, where no place will be for your father nor mother, and evenso though nor space for your brothers. Don't you hear how, my heart is screaming out loud, from all the pain inside me, that can't coming out. Searching for answers, why you left us behind, trying to understand, what was going on in your mind. still can't believe, that you decided to close the door, what left is my heartsore...you don't need us anymore.... |
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Cuddlez Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 422Walla Walla, WA 99362 |
Very good and true poem... Even though you feel this way now, please DONT CLOSE THE DOOR! Your daughter will come back to you... I guarantee. My sister has done the same thing before... When the going gets tough she will come back to you... GOOD LUCK~ Cuddlez Time flies? Say it not so, time stays we go. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Charisma~ Welcome! This is wonderful and understandable, and I agree with Cuddlez, she will come back, it's a promise. -SEA |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Welcome my friend. . . this is superb. . . and I must add my own words to those above. . . she will come back. . . Excellent. . . ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I have been patiently waiting for this Charisma. Tis only her desire to find an identity of her own...no reflection on you...hopefully she has found a good man...if not I can see the reason for your heartpain...She will always need her mother...take care sweet mother...James |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
charisma, First welcome to Passions.. I know you will like it here. Second of all, your daughter will come back. She always need her mother, I promise you. Next year I am moving to another state... and I know that my parents will always be in my heart with love. ~~Tara aka rp25 :o) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
She will come back as a couple of the others have said. In time she will grow to learn of the value of your love and she will be back in tears with outstretched arms. All she need from you right now is to know the door is open for her. Sometimes a person needs to find themselves in this world and after a long and exhausting search they will turn to home where they should have looked in the first place. WELCOME TO PASSIONS ...... Hope to see alot more of you and you did great in putting it to English. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to our family. You have done a good job on this poem. I also want to say I think your daughter will come back, once she has opened her eyes, she'll follow her heart back to you. Please check your email for a special message. |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
You translate your poetry to English with uncharacteristically good style - I would be hard pressed to guess your native tongue - I am not addressing the content - as I agree with those who've gone before me. I will pray for your quick reunion - I know your anguish. (Excellent first entry here) |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
once more I think |
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White Wolf Member
since 1999-09-18
Posts 371Somewhere in the vast wasteland |
I like the poem. It has reminded me of myself and my father, father to son. I was the one who went away. I had felt hurt and betrayed for, what I have realized very recently, what was no good reason. I had shut him out. He tried to get me back but the harded he tried the more I went away. Pretty soon I looked back at the distance between us was dishearted. How could I ever hope to bridge that gap. I was depressed for a time and hit the bottom. When I hit, I stood up and thought "If I fall into the gap, it couldn't be as hard as the fall I had just taken.". So I took that step into the gap only to find that I didn't fall. My dad had left a bridge there for me that I couldn't see. At that time I realized he loved me more than I could ever imagine. I thanked God and any other thing I could think of that my dad hadn't given up on me. The memory has brought tears to my eyes. Thank you for this. Keep that bridge there for her or that door open for that matter. I give you my faith that all will turn out how it should. The White Wolf |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Thank you all for your response, I haven't aspect that anyone should do that. But can't deny that Im happy with your comment. thank you for the warm welcome, I was afraid to post my poem, saw the high quality inhere, but also I was so desired to know and to learn more about writing poetry, Im only a simple woman, who like to write simple poetry, but when I wandered through passions, reading alot of poems inhere, my desire flame up and I want to become one of the poetry's inhere, not right a good one, but I keep on learning, though I am glad that I may feel welcome in the passions family. and you know what, my english is allready upgraded.....*lol* thank you all..... |
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