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Once Upon the Brink of Life
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Once Upon the Brink of Life |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Once Upon the Brink of Life Once upon the brink of life Before a single breath I pondered all this child faced Until his final death A lifelong battle he would fight To work and stay alive A complex world of namelessness In which he must survive A world with no more peace of mind A struggle to the death All these things I thought Before he took a single breath There upon the brink of life I wanted so to say Why don’t you wait until there comes A much more sunny day But there he was, an angel child Born into the world He lit the room with happiness His little hands unfurled My heart was overflowing With so much pride and joy So fortunate was mankind to have One more little boy And I could see as I looked down Into his little face The world is changing ,oh, so fast Into a better place Elizabeth Santos |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
They do make the world a better place, don't they!? Very tender, very beautiful! Denise |
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Jenn E Senior Member
since 2000-08-02
Posts 589Kelowna, BC, Canada |
This was so tender and sweet......funny how one look into their innocent little eyes makes everything seem better......I enjoyed this.  Jenn E |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--this tender verse makes me remember another little life...this is beautiful! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth~ Each one precious and filled with promise. Such lovely thoughts from your pen, as always. Love you and am thinking of you and Tony. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
So lovely, penned by that talented hand! Corinne |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
and e'en into old age, they still remain...your child... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
elizabeth- this is just precious. so sweet and touching. thanks for sharing this. -vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, you have not truely met the poet." -vlraynes |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Welcome back, a lovely poem. Love Sy |
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Wilfred Yeats Member Elite
since 2000-08-04
Posts 2704Wilmington, Delaware |
I do SO love your poetry - this touched special places for me |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
A touching poem for a touching subject. Nice work, Liz |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Elizabeth, You have left me smiling again Babies have a way of filling you with warmth and joy don't they? I'm so glad I stopped in rp25 |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I doubt there is anything as precious as the gift of child. Wonderful writing! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
{sits in silence} ...................fantastic................ Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Never could anything else compare. You have penned a beautiful creation for the MOST beautiful creation there is. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Liz, This is beauty as beauty itself... regards, sudhir |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I loved this piece, it really touched me. Reminded me of someone I know. Thank you Elizabeth. Elizabeth Something sweet, something sort of grandish, sweeps my soul when thou art near... [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sudhir,It's so nice to see your name on the screen again. You must be brousing old pages to have found this one. I would like to thank all of you for your nice comments. I guess this one slipped by so fast, I hadn't yet read the responses and I do so apprecaite all of them. Thank you all very much Liz |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
It's beautiful in every way. Kathleen |
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