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GOOD-Bye's |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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How sad to have to say "Good-Bye." Why don't we say "Sad-Bye"? What "Good" is gained from letting go, When hearts are yearning so? So often loved ones separate When touched by Hand of Fate; To trek thenceforth divergent way And share no common day. Yet none can see the road ahead; "Good" lies within their stead. Some future day perhaps by chance Paths cross by happenstance. Each passage then has much to tell - Best wish our loved ones well. When hearts are true there's no "Sad-Bye" Sincerity's "GOOD-Bye."  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 09-29-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Mind working in mysterious ways tonight a little, Nan? ROFL!! Love the way you twisted it around to bring it back to the original  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i really really love this one, nan... no, nothing good about goodbye... not one thing... thanks for sharing this |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Nan, This was so nifty!! I love the flow. You have taken a often sad occasion and gave it a happy twist. Nice work!!  Lone Wolf Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Thanks, guys.... I don't think I'd call this one of my best, but I had to meet my own classroom challenge today - My kids had to write a poem about saying "Good-Bye"...  |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hello Nan... I am ditto-ing all the replies above me, and adding this... In the gypsy culture of my ancestors there was a spiritual belief that good-bye did not exist. The belief is still valid, in that strong ties that once were, will complete a full circle, and the two souls will be reunited...if not in this plane, on the next level. Your third verse says the same, and it's a comfort to know: "We'll meet again"....... I truly loved this poem....and your style!  Today is a gift.... That is why they call it 'the Present'! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Nan, I loved this poem that I opened with apprehension. I'm so glad it's not sad byes from you. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Beautiful poem NAn, I hate saying goodbye, I prefer "until we meet again." saying farewell is never good. "an afixiation a fix on anything the line of life the limb of a tree the hands of he and the promise that s/he is blessed among women". Patti Smith |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well now look...even goodbyes bring good lessons... and I shall remember this, and have it reposted, shall I ever quit the bluest halls of Passion [probably a long time in coming...] and Nan, while admittedly from you "not one of [your] best", you still wield well... Karilea When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan~ I found this piece to be excellent in portraying a message ... Now that's GOOD poetry - no matter how you slice it ! ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Kit McCallum
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since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful Nan! I loved your thoughts in this, so sad are goodbyes, but with sincerity, our good intentions bring the meaning through. Loved the way your portrayed this! Best wishes, /Kit |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Nan - I really like the way you moved from the loss to the wish in this poem. I think I understand this poem as you inended it - The 'good' in goodbye is not meant to portray emotions, but instead is meant as a wish for happiness and safety for the person(s) who are departing, as in 'good luck.' I really like the way you presented this lesson. As always, you are a wonderful teacher. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, Just love your mind and the rest of you too. |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
And another lesson well taught as the student poets rejoice in having actually grown in the wisdom in another verse from one of our leaders of guidance. Well written and lesson taken with smiles.  [This message has been edited by Mark Bohannan (edited 09-30-2000).] |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Nan, I really, really like this one. P'raps it's from my way of never saying good-bye if I can at all help it. Usually, I stick with TTYL...  Til next, Miss Nanners....ttyl. If I were any more laid back, I'd be in a coma. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Nan I really liked this piece a lot. This one sort of weaved itself. Goodbyes are very hard but I thought it was very clever how you turned such a sad subject into something positive. Take care. Amy P.S. Also liked the pattern of this one. "The head learns knew things, but the heart forever more practices old experiences" |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Nan With many poets saying good bye to Passions recently, I thought this was totally appropriate. There is nothing pleasant about saying or receiving a good-bye. You said this wasn't your best work in one of your responses, but I loved it. Nothing pleasant about good-byes. Garfield |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well - It surely is nice to be appreciated... Deer - You above all should know that my mind ALWAYS works in mysterious ways.. Doreen - Hello then.. Lone Wolf - Thankya muchly for stopping and enjoying.. Sunny - Nice to see you... and I like your gypsy philosophy.. Kethry - Not to worry - Passions is an integral part of me.... as I am of Passions - We're inseparable... Thanks for the kind words... Brian - LOL... I could make a sequel about "Farewell".... as opposed to "Farebadly"... ya think??? Sunshine - Thankee... I weally wish to wield well wegardless..... Marge - Message recieve?... Then I guess I succeeded.. I wonder if my kids in school got it... Kit - Thanks - I'm really pleased when I see our members returning after we wish them happy sabbaticals... LJA - SMOOOOOOCHES...  Sy - Likewise, my special friend.. Mark - Thanks for the nice comments - and there's a graphic I don't have.. Alicat - TTYLTNP - Talk To You Later - Till Next Persnikitty... Aimster - Thanks for the kind words... Now if I could only take my own advice, eh??.. ggrn3 - Yeah... 'Tis so... We wait anxiously for our absent members to return - Most do, but some don't - C'MON BACK YOU GUYS!!!..... |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Nan, this is beautiful,, I love the flower and the graphic. "When red-haired girls scamper like roses over the rain-green grass, and the sun drips honey."" Laurie Lee Kathleen |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
I agree with you....you have penned the good/sad-bye vere well..... Charisma |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Nan~ I enjoyed this......sometimes good-bye is so painful, other times, it is welcomed! -SEA[This message has been edited by SEA (edited 10-30-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This flows very nicely, Nan. I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Poet's Sister Member
since 2000-10-16
Posts 80North Carolina |
Can't add anything new to all that has been said. I'll just add my agreement that I love how you turned a sad subject into a happy one and loved the flow of this. |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
WOW - So many more visitors... Thanks for coming by.. Irish Rose, Charisma, Sea, Denise, & Sis... I'm soooooo glad you enjoyed... "You say good-bye and I'll say hello"... There's a song there, eh??.. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Nancy - this is absolutely fabulous, I love it. Can't find more words at the moment, but if I do I'll come back. Bill |
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